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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 8:48 pm


	I dont have a title for it yet, but if you have one in mind feel free to post it. She slits her wrists When she is feeling down She slits her wrists When no one is around She slits her wrists Though she is not high She slits her wrists Though no one knows why She slits her wrists So she feels comfortable She slits her wrists No one thinks she's loveable He loves her All hands down He loves her Though in her sorrow he drowns He loves her There is no deny He loves her Until he may die He loves her His love is reliable He loves her Their love is viable

Posted: Fri Feb 09, 2007 11:21 pm


	Nothing bad about this I can say. it reminds me of me and meh Kiefer - kun! heart whee 4laugh 3nodding Good job kid.

~Rei the kawii chibi~

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Saikiyoumi

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Posted: Mon Feb 12, 2007 5:26 pm


	I like it alot! Very nice! Only suggestion the 'thoughs' bugged me a bit, but nothing major! and thats just a personal preference.

Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 2:52 pm

Kirika_35

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~Rei the kawii chibi~

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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 2:48 pm

Posted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 5:33 am


	I think it was okay...good job 3nodding

cursed imp

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