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'depression shaped the world'-a poem by me

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Prince_Padraic

PostPosted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 7:20 am
depression shaped the world

i sat there in my failure and cried
as my innocences last breath faded.
no matter how hard we all try,
in the end we all are jaded.
the tears of my innocence fell so hard
that they destroyed my world below.
and with my broken worlds every shard
i gave my world a crimson snow.
the sunset faded one last time.
the light quivered...then dissapeared.
i must take the punishment of my crime.
cutting a canyon with my tears.
will the sun ever rise...
above this world,painted blood red...?
waiting,trying to close my eyes...
because this world,ive come to dread...
______________________________________________________________

the sun will come no more

i try to stop the sun,to fix the time ive damaged
but like the sun,you pass on by.
im such a small part of the suns routine...
it cant wait for me...
and as it sets in the distance..i feel it leave me..
it causes me so much pain,watching my light,my worth leave me..
and as the last ray of light sinks into the horizon the lonilness takes over...
im surrounded by the darkness...the cold sets in...
my own haunting demons return,theyre leaving theyre hiding places.
they thrive in the darkness the sun has left,taking pride in my pain...
i cant hide from them,cant find the light of the sun...
i wait for it to return...the suns safe warmth and loving shine ..
but all in vain...
i must watch in envy as the moon rises from the darkness..
it bathes in the sun's light,glowing in glory;in happyness
as the sun covers the moon in its light i realize tomorrow will not come...
so i wait till the day i dont have to wake up to this eternal night
the day the sun's light will return and liberate me from this hell
....the sun doesnt care for me
im just a small part of the suns routine.
i needed the sun to wait,just wait so i could patch up the clock.
but the sun doesnt need me...i need the sun
beautiful angel...you are the sun...
goodnight my sun,goodnight my everything...
your light cannot be found...






thank you guys for reading.  
PostPosted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 7:24 am
i like the first one alot. But the second one, very deep  

Balmung372


Prince_Padraic

PostPosted: Mon Feb 26, 2007 8:00 pm
eh..no one likes em.....? sweatdrop  
PostPosted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 1:48 pm
The first poem is kind of iffy. With over-used verses like 'my innocence fell... waiting... dread.' We've heard it all. But the second poem. Beautiful. Emotive. A picture worthy of praise. Great job. I look foward to more.  

Placeo


totally_out_of_it

PostPosted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 2:34 pm
I like both of them. Good job. ^^  
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