Yeah. Out on a limb here. Content Warning.

[-Isel-]

So... I'm posting my song lyrics. The reason I'm going out on a limb, is because let's face it- I've trashed so much s**t here, I've probably earned a few grudging enemies who'd love to smear my works with bad responses.

We'll start with my attempt at vulgar imagery, my most rhythmically-sound lyricism. Note cocaine reference and a House of 1000 Corpses reference.

Violated
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It was almost as if
I wanted it gone
Oh, a white powder sniff
Castrated, no spawn

Shoved off the waistline
Lost all the hair
Take it from mine, take it from mine
It’s your skin I’ll wear

Raped by a speculum
Violated with a bonesaw

I’ll see if you’re in awe

By now there’s no structure
Released from what’s ******** her
It’s now, It’s now
Mutilated beyond repair

Raped by a speculum
Violated with a bonesaw

Thought I’d start a business
Doing all the s**t that’s like this
One dream, I get off to think
To put out 2000 degrees in your pink
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I may post one of my other well-structured songs, with appropriately-used Japanese in it, if I get good feedback and the aforementioned nemeses don't backlash.  

[Rellik San]

Its like a funk singer had a psychotic break down with satanic over tones.

NICE!  

[-Isel-]

Thank you.  

[Placeo]

I'll second what Relik-san said, just because he captures it so well. And to say it in any other way would sully the concise but warm 'wow'. *Stunned*  

[-Isel-]

Is it really that good?  

[[Posh_Hypno]]

Interesting ....  

[Rellik San]

Isel

Is it really that good?

Indeed, the force is strong in this one.  

[-Isel-]

Then I'll post another song. This one's multilingual, my main concentration was syllable symmetry in the manner of 7-14-7 syllables in every verse, with the last lines of verses being in Japanese, syllables increasing in odd numbers (1, 3, 5, etc.).

No
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this new language is all toss.
i wouldn’t blame you children if you can’t understand it.
this new language is all mess.
iie.

lamentation is fetal thought.
it’s always the insignificant feelings that we harbor.
lactation is worth the obsession.
seiyugi.

i want to feel good.
i want to receive caress.
i want to come hard.

the radius is too large.
the figure that i’m lusting for is way too far back.
the radius, perfect hips.
seitekisho do.

tell me all your good feelings.
your mind’s own pleasures are what enthralls me so -seiteki-
tell me if you’re excited.
ryoseiguyu, bodikon.

i want to feel good.
i want to receive caress.
i'm in a great mood
and i'll wear a pretty dress
i want to come hard.
satisfied and scarred.  

[-Isel-]

Come on, comments?

Pretty pl0x?  

[Rellik San]

DEG influence screamingly obvious here, but an interesting social commentry, I imagine slow heavy chugging guitars and lyrics at a low mutter.  

[Gambino Statue]

I like both of them. Particularly your use of the word speculum.

Also I now feel dirty for knowing what せいてきしょうどう meant.  

[-Isel-]

Ah, thank you, your comment definitely makes me happy. I now know my internet-translated Japanese makes sense. ^^

Another song. A lot less a**l about rhythm, too. Meant to be slow, bass-y, and have a sordid atmosphere to it. Basically, like if Tool covered Alice In Chains' "Love Hate Love"

felt again
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you're no macabre superstar
sickened, syringe sex drive

i saw you...
you were the one sitting on the wall
smelling of vomit
mouth agape
staring at the flies you thought you saw

was i washed away and nothing
thought so, thanks farewell

longed for the addict's hell you would
i always knew it's the skin that fits you best
pale, cold, clammy and ugly
sweat-covered and bed-ridden
tongue dry and swollen, fingers feeble

was i washed away and nothing
thought so, thanks farewell
you disgust me
you disgust me
you disgust me

i thought it was you (i thought and i knew)
blonde, blue-eyed, pale and beautiful
you could tell the boys didn't think you had a worm
and it got you off at night

was i washed away and nothing
thought so, thanks farewell
was i washed away and nothing
thought so, thanks farewell

you play a dangerous game, chap
damsel in distress smeared on the floor
deluded
diluted
deluded
diluted  

[Rellik San]

It was all good, until I got to the chap... then I just burst out laughing, and suddenly had a mental image of english bankers discussing this over tea whilst browsing the financial times.

But aside from that, again another great song, when are you touring?  

[-Isel-]

Rellik San

It was all good, until I got to the chap... then I just burst out laughing, and suddenly had a mental image of english bankers discussing this over tea whilst browsing the financial times.

But aside from that, again another great song, when are you touring?

I don't know when we're touring. We're working out a big practice date over the impending Spring Break, two weeks from now.

And hell, what's good metal without a few laughs on the side?  

[Rellik San]

Isel

Rellik San

It was all good, until I got to the chap... then I just burst out laughing, and suddenly had a mental image of english bankers discussing this over tea whilst browsing the financial times.

But aside from that, again another great song, when are you touring?

I don't know when we're touring. We're working out a big practice date over the impending Spring Break, two weeks from now.

And hell, what's good metal without a few laughs on the side?

Thats true, get mired in seriousness and you end up like Gerard and Mikey Way... and no one wants that.