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-Confucius had his Analects and I have my journal-
Opinions needed
I remember when the dream was fresh
I smiled about it
You were all I could think about
You haunt my dreams
I can still feel your kiss
Your touch reminds me of what I don’t have
When I look in your eyes
I see what could have been
What used to be
I'll never forget
The moments we shared
But sometimes
The pain becomes so unbearable
That I want to forget
But when I truly think about it
It’s better to keep every memory
The good surpasses the bad
I’d adore to have your kiss
Instead of think of how it’d be like
If you were right here
I remember when everything was falling apart
I wanted to say
Stay with me
But the words never reached you
That in itself
Also haunts me
It makes me wonder if you would have seen it as a desperate attempt
To have you with me always
Or would you have seen it as words from the heart
Well, either which way
They were words from the heart
But I was afraid to tell you
I know you don’t like it when I do that
Not tell you something
But it’s a bad habit
The belief that some things are better left unsaid
Is still here
Maybe it’s not so much that you haunt me
But the memories are so vivid
And so painful
It might as well be
That you haunt me

((I didn't mean to rhyme on the last two lines...It just sorta worked that way.))

Does this look like this needs to be edited? I'm sorta wondering if some parts need to be cut out..Please leave a comment as a suggestion.






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Indigo Sonoda
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commentCommented on: Fri Jul 27, 2007 @ 05:39pm
I like it quite a bit and I don't really see anything needed to be edited.


commentCommented on: Fri Jul 27, 2007 @ 06:31pm
same here



Natsuma Oden
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Mcdevvopiez
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commentCommented on: Fri Jul 27, 2007 @ 11:37pm
Don't change anything! I love it just the way it is!


commentCommented on: Sat Jul 28, 2007 @ 08:16pm
Absolutely beautiful. I really like it, it's sweet and meaningful. I think you captured the emotions very very well. 3nodding



Taimi
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umaketwan
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commentCommented on: Sun Jul 29, 2007 @ 05:09pm
I likes it a lot! I don't think anything does need to be edited, it's perfect!


commentCommented on: Mon Jul 30, 2007 @ 06:07am
Absolutely wonderfull. Changing anything wouldn't make it any better.



dragndude9
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