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	Feeling Is Believing [Poem]
	Feeling Is Believing [Poem]


☆☆ Feeling Is Believing by: Duck You are cute, you are sweet But I'm still a bit naive I'm not sure what to believe When you tell me that you love me I can feel my heart restrained There's so much more I need to say I just can't walk away You've got me hooked on you You are a mystery, a secret When I don't know what I'm living for When I'm not sure what I love you for You remind me with your brilliant smile But I'm afraid I won't ever be happy Because I hate myself for feeling this way I'm holding onto every word you say It's keeping me up at night I want you to feel how I feel Take my hand, complete me I really just wish you could see This love runs deeper than you'll ever know I love you to the point of pain But your love can set me free You and me We can make it better No pain is too deep For your loving gaze to heal What we have is so surreal It's almost like magic ☆☆ xBroken Porcelainx · Wed Nov 14, 2007 @ 03:45am · 28 Comments


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	On all your poems I try to imagine what's going on. XP It's usually you and either Kyou or Yuki. o.o I'm not sure this was like that this time o_o Was it? ANYWAY, it's good. Too good. Not really. ^__^ It's expected from you! Typo: You are cute, you are sweet But I'm still a bit naive I'm not sure what to believe When you tell me that you love me I can feel feel my heart restrained There's so much more I need to say I just can't walk away You've got me hooked on you Offline Tsukiyama Hara · Community Member · Wed Nov 14, 2007 @ 03:59am


	o.o As odd as this sounds, this reminds me of CTxHatori. o_O Tis wonderful. biggrin Offline x-JennaCIDE-x · Community Member · Mon Nov 19, 2007 @ 03:05am


	i think its really good. im not just saying it because of your thread. i seriously think its good. D; i cant write for beans. Offline jspaceboy · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 12:32am


	(not here for your thread. just saw it, and wanted to see your poetry.) sort of makes me think lyrics, not poem. but pretty :] Offline cathycathypsychopathy · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 12:40am


	I love it its so good my poems sound like lyrics ^_^ Offline Kookies123 · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 01:01am


	align=center] Very nice =] I like the way you decided upon using stanzas, yet it is realistic, and not warped. Love the illiterations and the chosen words. Good work!!!! can't wait to read more! Offline Thee Ringmaster · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 01:09am


	I liked this poem very much ^-^ It reminds me of the crush I had on Michael. Maybe I should try to move back to New Mexico and use this poem to tell him how I feel 3nodding Offline ArielMew · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 01:26am


	Wow, I read your poerty and it paints a magical painting. It rolls a movie film that crosses my mind. it makes me feel warm, and yet cold. It has so much power and emotion. Offline Mags III · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 02:07am


	You have a nice orginal rhyming scheme :] This is a nice piece of poetry in itself, but I think you wanted to say more, but weren't too sure how you'd fit it. If this could get published, im afraid of what some of my stuff could do. hahah. Oh, and remember vocabulary is your friend, and repetitiveness should be avoided :33 Offline Nuclear_Ember · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 06:30am


	Wow! That was really good. I can imagine that being a song. >< How did you get your journal all blue? I want my to be purple! blaugh Minifan! Offline minifan_75_peaceout · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 06:52am


	i really like your paragragh set up, with the two middle paragraghs ryhming and yet the others not. thats my favorite thing b/c it's defianatly unique, most peots usually go with full on ryhming or freeverse but you did a mixed. domokun keep up the writing. even if it doesn't get published the first time b/c most writers that are really famous it took them a while to find a publisher and it's even twice as hard for poets. i should know my mom's one, though i'm more of a novel writer but take it from me your work has great potintioal cuz it's so unique, which also could scare publishers off b/c it's a abstract idea but i'm sure you can get it published...i guess i should stop now i didn't realize how long this comment got. srry if it's to long. sweatdrop Offline midge66 · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 08:06am


	Wow. Nice poem. Your avatar ish pretty. biggrin Offline small utters · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 07:56pm


	Thats nice I took a poetry class in college and I have seen famous poet write things not half as good as this^^ Offline ShUtDoWn_23 · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 08:25pm


	that reminded me of the first time i met my G/f, lol i really like that one!!! heart Offline OrangeFlavoredMuthaPhucka · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 11:45pm


	personally i do like it! i'm not much of a poem writer myself ( i write fanfictions ) i think its really sweet i like it a lot Offline eya_suoh · Community Member · Thu Nov 29, 2007 @ 11:50pm


	OMG this is really good i love it yur a good poet! Offline Beloved Aquamarine · Community Member · Fri Nov 30, 2007 @ 12:03am


	Wow.... Great journal i love the poetry! Offline hollywood_ice_crystal · Community Member · Fri Nov 30, 2007 @ 12:04am


	I loved this! I loved how the second and third stanzas rhymed each time and this really touched me T.T Tis true! You shall write of book of poems and I shall buy em :3 Offline MissehKissehO_o · Community Member · Fri Nov 30, 2007 @ 12:04am


	it sounds like lyrics :]<3 Offline Hazed Love · Community Member · Fri Nov 30, 2007 @ 12:32am


	i like it. this is not an insult but if your school offers a writing class like i think they call it dam i can't think but ask your counseler. it can help you expand it help my friend and she got something published through the class Offline your_Aunt_Flow · Community Member · Fri Nov 30, 2007 @ 01:04am


	Honestly, I really love this poem. It is conveys the exact message I have been trying to send to the one whom of which I still love. This is very well written, and I am quite impressed. Being a fellow poet, I also have a bit of critiquing to do if you don't mind. First off, over all rating, 8/10. I say this because I would have tweaked it a bit, but for my personal feelings and style. I'd say that there are only a few lines I would rearrange or recreate. Other than that, I say perfection isn't too far from from your reach. I would like to ask if I may take some of your poem and add my own adjustments to it. I will not post this on gaia, I just want to send it to my special someone and hope that maybe this is a better way to express my feelings rather than what I had been doing in the past. Please feel free to PM for an answer or add me. I would be more than happy to accept and talk about such poems with you. Thanks for allowing me to read such a wonderful masterpiece. It was an honor reading it... cool Offline Vladamir Krusnik · Community Member · Fri Nov 30, 2007 @ 01:29am


	O_O; I like it. It's really deep and so true! It really makes you think about it... Poem or song? I can't even decide ... I'm not really good at poems x'D... So I doubt I'll be able to give you serious feedback. Just wanted to comment this... It's great, really. <'3 Offline Yugaiba · Community Member · Fri Nov 30, 2007 @ 07:41pm


	That was nice 3nodding Offline jesters knight · Community Member · Sat Dec 01, 2007 @ 06:33am


	SOUTHERN COMFORT by: Colby duggin (me) Stumbling drunk on shock and pain Reeling backwards with the shame I'm drinking with the devil in diguise Sometimes you would show your face, Smoke and mirrors all replaced Anguish turned to revenge served on ice... 1 part rage:3parts fear,Tequila sunrise laced with tears Strong enough to drown all memory Now seen clearly in black light Silver bullets in your eyes Didn't know I was begging for my life Your southern comfort never got me high, never got me by Your southern comfort left me high and dry, Your southern comfort never said goodbye Drinkin' with the devil was too high a price to pay; Thought I had recovered, when will this hangover fade? ROYAL RED ANGEL = BEST Offline Royal Red Angel · Community Member · Sat Dec 01, 2007 @ 04:01pm


	Wow your poetry is deep and filled with emotion. I love it all so much!!! 'I love you to the point of pain But Your love can set me free' I love that line so much!!! is it okay if I subscribe to your Journal? Offline lacus_yamato_clyne_blonde · Community Member · Sat Dec 01, 2007 @ 04:02pm


	I really like it its Nice Offline J~28 · Community Member · Sat Dec 01, 2007 @ 10:28pm


	Duck, this is a very beautiful poem and dare i say it one of my favourites, the words are so powerful and have such meaning to them. I love the imagry that was created by using these words. heart Love ya, Don razz Offline xMysticallyxArtisticx · Community Member · Thu Mar 20, 2008 @ 04:33am

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