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-Confucius had his Analects and I have my journal-
BEAUITFUL
Eyes are beautiful
Seeing is beautiful
Blind eyes
Yes, are beautiful
Too see
Is a gift
To understand
Is rich
Even to those that can't see
I don't need to look into your eyes to see your sincerity
I feel it
Yes, feeling is rich
Feeling is beautiful
Allowing your passion to fill another's heart
Is a gift
Hearing is beautiful you know
"I love you."
"I'll be there."
Hearing is painful
"I hate you."
"You're just a pretender."
"You're ugly."
Hearing is a gift
Speaking is a weapon
To cure
And destroy
Sense should be ordinary
But it's not
Street smarts aren't my skill
Yet homework gets done easily
Sense is a gift

You make me feel
I understand all that you speak
You are my gift
Shed more light upon me to see
Because this shadowed arena
That I call my heart
Could have you
I want you to conquer me
Be my Seme
Tell me what I need to hear
Show me your world
Let us be

My God
Being alive
Is beautiful






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Saygen40
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commentCommented on: Tue Jun 03, 2008 @ 12:29am
I like it. smile Simple yet elegantly written. It focuses more on feeling of words than structure of the poem and diction which makes the style perfect for your meaning. smile I also really enjoy how you did the
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My God
Being Alive
Is beautiful"

Very well emphasis and I also really just enjoy how you said that. Nice poem, Gunner. smile


commentCommented on: Tue Jun 03, 2008 @ 01:16am
Hrm, not really my style of poem, but i like it. Poetic element wise, not much, word wise, pretty good. It could use work here and there, but every poem can until finally it hits the point where it has nothing more to e done, then even it could use mroe work.



Impending Darkness
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dragonrebelfire
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commentCommented on: Wed Jun 04, 2008 @ 01:04am
Wow gn, that was good.


commentCommented on: Wed Jun 04, 2008 @ 05:20am
realize your potential , this one was good but next time i want a great one that i know u can do ^_^



Natsuma Oden
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Idiosyncratic Quirk
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commentCommented on: Sun Sep 06, 2009 @ 01:45am
Parts of this are good but in all, it sucks.


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