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Raven's Crossroads
Ok so this is my story that I am attempting to write><;; I also am making a list of my characters. I would love it if people would read and comment on this. it would really help me^^
4th attempt
~there is a character page where I put all my important people in there. You can read more into the characters^^~


Ckestrial ran full speed up to the mansion.Scratches and blood on his face. He threw open the door and yelled out "SHES GONE!!" Everyone turned to look at him.There faces full of confusion.Until they realized who he was. They all covered there mouths in shock. 'God these people are lame.But hey maybe I did over do it with the blood.But still i can't believe there actually trying to care..what a bore i wish I could have gone with her.' Continuing his little act he ran down the hallway to the dining room wanting to make Morzon look stupid in front of the most important people in his house right now.Once again he burst threw the doors and shouted, "SHES GONE!!" Every one turned there head his way. Everyone looked confused except Morzon who could only guess what had happened to his other daughter.Considering His favorite was right beside him.
"What do you mean she is gone Ckestrial?" he asked calmly, thinking she probably just ran into the woods again.
"Well sir she said that she was going to sleep in late this morning, but when I went in there to give her breakfast she wasn't in her bed.So I searched the castle and the grounds. Not to mention I did a very good search of the woods.I even went to the demon pit Sir Abysey is keeping." Stopping so he could catch his breath he had just explained about his disheveled, his prescence in the woods, and his blood. He truley was turning out to be a great actor.
Morzon stood queitly and beckoned towards his daughter,Kasai. "Come my child we have work to do." he said walking out of the room. Kasai right on his tail.
Walking down the main hallway Morzon turned quickly into a room with a large Oval mirror standing in the middle. It's width about seven feet, while it's height reached ten feet. Walking straight up to it he pulled Kasai in fron t of him. "Just like I taught you when you were younger." was what he whispered to her.
Kasai nodded and placed her finger on the smooth surface.her thoughts forming the Raven necklace around her throat, knowing that Leyli had one just like it on her.
Though the reason why Morzon couldn't find Leyli was because he had not donned himself worthy enough to name her or give her one gift over the sixteen years she had lived. The mirror could feel this when he touched it and refused to work. it had always valued family life. So he figured out a way for someone else under his complete control to work it. He had trianed Kasai every day for two whole years before she had learned to work it. all she had to do was find a link between them besides family.therefore she thought of there twin necklaces. Which they both always wore.
The smooth surface started to ripple when Kasai had her thought finished. though the only thing it showed when it stopped it's wavelength was blackness.
"What the hell is wrong with this thing!" Kasai yelled about to punch her fist through it.
Morzon shoved Kasai out of the way "Why do you always refuse to show me what I most want?" he bellowed at the mirror.
Images flowed over the smooth surface. The first was dark night 4 years ago, Morzon was leaning over Eelena while she slept.Slowly he lowered himself down to her throat and whispered "She'll die just like you." He bit into her throat and sucked the life out of her.
Another scene flashed across the screen right after that one finished. This one showed Kasai and Morzon at dinner eleven years ago. Leyli sat at the very end of the large table. Kasai leaned over and whispered into her father's ear. Morzon smiled and stood up clearing his voice. "Leyli your sister has made a very nice suggestion. Would you like to hear it?" feeling wanted Leyli bobbed her head up in down in answer. Morzon grinned "Well we have suggested that you take dinner alone in your room. I will provide a servant for you." Leyli's face fell while Kasai's shone in pure enjoyment. She stood up and annonced "Your such a loser nobody wants you here. So just leave and never show your face here again. Your not part of this family." Morzon smiled in response he placed his arm over her shoulder. As Leyli ran out of the room crying.
The mirror returned back to it's grey color. Only infuriating Morzon even more. his thoughts full of anger. "Thats why I have never been able to use this stupid mirror because I wasn't a good eneough father?! Thats why Kasai can't find her now?! because of some sisterly rivalry!" he yelled at the Mirror. Kasai was in a foul mood as well. She stared at the mirror with the most deadliest of her looks.
In response the mirror stayed silent.Morzon and Kasai turned from it aggrevated.When all of a sudden there was a loud cracking sound from behind them. They swiveled around to pinpoint the source of the sound.
The large Mirror had one long diagonally crack on it's front. another began to appear longways. everyone stared in horror. All there thought's the same 'the mirror is destroying itself.!' suddenly the surface of the mirror crashed in on itself, the glass raining down on Morzon and Kasai creating little cuts all over there bodies. This was the response to Morzon's yeling and Kasai's stares.






User Comments: [2]
nihil totium
Community Member





Mon Aug 18, 2008 @ 12:27am


you're getting better! i'm really fond of the mirror disliking Morzon...

magic items that are alive are common but i can't remember an item ever committing suicide because it was temperamental before!
very original!

at first i missed some dialogue from the mirror, but in hindsight considering it dies so quickly it would have just been sad...
so good call!


Sir Sky Suicide
Community Member





Mon Aug 18, 2008 @ 07:12am


omfg i luv ur stories! keep it up, its sooooooooooooo intreging!


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