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I'd like to apologize in advance for my langauge >.>"

So I have a Creative Writing class and we did an exercise today. We sat in a circle. Everyone wrote a beginning of a story. Then we passed it to the next person and they added and then passed on and so on. My story turned out to be s**t, thanks to some idiots in the class. A different color for a different writer, me being the first: (Pay close attention to the one in blue)

About midday, in a town called Filmar, a blonde-haired woman is standing outside a bank, hiding her face in a magazine. Her purple high-heeled boots compliment her unusal purple outfit which hugs her body tightly. A young man, about 23, approaches the bank and enters. The lady drops her magazine and follows him inside. The man walks straight into the restricted area. "Hey Hey!" a security guard shouts as he runs towards him. The woman, a little further behind the man,....

watched it all happen with not a shock on her face. Why she herself expected that to happen. Then with a bang that roared throughout the town, the security guard fell. In the man's hand is a gun covered in blood and as he looked down on the floor, he saw a body lying lifeless with...

She layed there lifeless. She had been shot in the side of her body and in around her chest area. She tired to talk to the person who was trying to help her but he said save your energy until help comes. The guard said stop that woman with the gun who was trying to run away from the scene.

The he, who turned out to be a she, ran as fast as she could down the main street and away from the cops. She ran throught the park, the fish market, and managed to elude the many squads of angry sirens until she reached the city's tallest brigde

Then another mistake...I'll skip all this stuff about her getting there thinking of jumping and then her bf pulls up IN A CAR. In...a...car! Right? That said car...Well anyways, they kiss and she said you came to save me blah blah and they start to RUN by foot! What about his ******** car!? Why are they running instead of taking the car?

Must I say more?

Kitty_Starlighter
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Commented on: Tue Mar 06, 2007 @ 05:44am


	wow that's stupid @_@ giggles i think i did something more stupid by belivieing that pm thing though X__X

Commented on: Thu Mar 08, 2007 @ 05:59am


	confused Purple outfit..... blond hair..... were you thinking of Ino from "Naruto"? Anyway I liked your opening!

Supreme_Princess_Purple
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Commented on: Fri Mar 09, 2007 @ 02:31am


	ummm Mai Kujaku from yugioh?

Commented on: Fri Mar 09, 2007 @ 10:29pm


	...wow... people need help these dayz stare

Rae27
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Crystalcat16
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Commented on: Tue Mar 13, 2007 @ 12:48am


	O.O um yeah I can see why the line in blue was stupid. I mean HOW CAN THE WOMAN TALK TO THE GUARED WHEN THE GUARD JUST GOT KILLED!? IT MAKES NO SENCE AND IT TOTALLY RUINS THE STORY BIG TIME!!!!! scream scream crying crying crying

Commented on: Tue Mar 13, 2007 @ 03:50am


	i would agree with cat haha

ShiningJustice32
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ShadowxSai
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Commented on: Tue Mar 13, 2007 @ 07:58pm


	Well not the fact that the woman is talking to the guard...also the fact that the man who shot the guard turned out to be a "she".... stare

Commented on: Wed Apr 11, 2007 @ 02:26am


	So...She shot herself? Or was there another girl...What happened to the guy.. I'm confused.

Cant Scream
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Commented on: Thu Apr 12, 2007 @ 07:36pm


	Haha glad you understand the confusion, Nat xP

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