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That's so well done. I find it hard to write in the present tense, but you did it, as far I know, flawlessly. And I didn't see anyspelling mistakes.
It's a good story, I love the beginning, how we're suddenly plunged into this dark, dangerous scene. The whole story is full of great descriptions.
I'm only left thinking, "why is he sorry?", but maybe I just didn't read it well enough, because it's 4am and I'm getting a little on the tired side. But it's a good story, I'm impressed.

Pretty good stuff...One of my favorite hobbies is studying Serial Killer Psychology. I think you got it down pretty well.