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tksunshine93's Poetry
This is just some of my poetry...some published some not
Just a little song or poem or whatever you want to call it that came to me while I was trying to fall asleep. I know it's not great but it sounds better as a song,sadly I'm not much of a composer so I didn't write a melody to go along with it. Any ways.....

If any of y'all can think of a title for this that would be greatly appreciated because for the life of me I can't think of anything. Thanks!! 4laugh

Here I stand
Alone
Someone come take my hand
Hello
Can't you hear
Please
Come and remove my fear

You know
Who you are
You know
I've gone too far
You look so angry
I know
You have reasons to hate me
I'm sorry
For what I did
But can't you
Just please forgive

I'm begging please
Help me
I need release
Save me
And know the truth
Everything
Was only for you

You know
You're the only one
You know
Of all I've done
I feel so empty
I know
That you still love me
I explain
Everything I did
And you are
Learning to forgive

Here I stand
With you
Holding my hand
Thank you
I knew you'd hear
Now it's my turn
To vanquish your fears






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mexicantacos2003
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commentCommented on: Mon Dec 22, 2008 @ 10:06pm
okay i have only one suggestion in me

solitary confinement.

i don't know if it fits or not because you talk about other people
but the way you express your feelings does seem a little lonely.


commentCommented on: Mon Dec 29, 2008 @ 08:53pm
i still think "Take my hand" is a good title. How about "Of all i've done"? i like to use a line from the poem for the title generally...Good luck!


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