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Remember... I thirst for you. I thirst for you. I stand at your heart, knocking. I will stay here, knocking, even when you doubt it's me. I thirst for you, as well as you should thirst for me. I knock, and knock, and knock. Someday, you will let me in. I thirst for you.

Posted by: Abandoned Sword Mon Jan 18, 2010 @ 08:15pm

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Laybunny
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Commented on: Mon Jan 18, 2010 @ 08:41pm


	It's cute, but thrist is kinda a funny word to use. I would use, "long" or "wait" or something more romantic/cute/special

Commented on: Mon Jan 18, 2010 @ 08:43pm


	umm it's not supposed to be romantic or cute or anything. it's generally means someone is waiting at your heart and will knock until you let himher in.

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Commented on: Mon Jan 18, 2010 @ 08:48pm


	Well, when I read your poem it gives me the feeling of a sad romance or a close relation that never blossoms. If you don't want it to be a cute/romantic poem then you shouldn't write it that way. Futhermore, you used, "wait", in your reply, and that was one of the suggestions I gave.

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