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hello govna (Didn't get what it was trying to tell me to do so yeah)
alright so I'm bored so I'm going to start writing fanfiction in my journal so if you read this and think a friend would like it feel free to tell them! as you will notice I'm no the best with punctuation but I'm giving it a shot so this first fanfiction I'm writing is a one piece fanfiction btw GO STRAW HATS! had to say that so any way this takes place after Luffy has become king of the pirates like way after like years and has some new additions to the crew including his five year old daughter Haru and his wife Raven Sanji and Nami are married now and have twins named Danielle and Drew Danielle is a girl and drew is a boy btw those are the only couples on the crew FOR NOW! you never know what may happen especially on the grand line

Chapter one~~~~ Everyone's after the pirate king ~~~~~~~
The straw hats had made port on a new island in the grandline all was actually quiet on the Sunny go well accept for
"HARU!" Raven yelled looking for the five year old she hadn't been with Zoro which normally wasn't a good idea she always was with Zoro for some reason little kids just seemed to like the marimo for some reason so the crew was a little freaked out at the moment not able to find the five year old who was so much like her father.
"Haru where are you?" Raven shouted Raven had waist length black straight and silky hair with tan skin and an hour glass figure she had almond shaped jade green eyes she wore a purple tanktop and blue jean shorts and black shoes her normally smiling face had more than a little scared look on her face
"Why are little kids so hard to keep track of?" Zoro asked helping her look Luffy then walked over
"Hey what's with all the noise"
"Your kid is missing" Zoro said Luffy gave a rather confused look
"No Haru is sitting on the figure head" Luffy said Raven and Zoro stopped and sweatdropped a little bit why hadn't they checked there first? Raven walked over to the figure head Haru like Luffy had said was sitting on the figure head she had a flower in her hand and was plucking the petals off and dropping them into the ocean
"Haru you're supposed to be taking a nap" Raven said sighing and sitting on the rail next to the young girl Haru looked just like her mother accept for two things her eyes were a dark brown and her hair was more of a messy black and pulled back in a small pony tail sense her hair only reached her shoulders she smiled at her mother
"But I'm not tired and Daddy said I didn't have to" she said Raven this time got an anime vein
"Luffy!" she yelled Luffy smiled at his wife and laughed at the reaction a bit
"If she's not tired why make her sleep?" Luffy asked Raven sighed sometimes he really got on her nerves
"Alright fine she doesn't have to take a nap but she does have to come shopping with me for a new dress" Raven said Haru always wore a yellow dress with buttercups on it but the dress was rather worn down by now and she had out grown it a little bit
"Alright I will" Haru said
"Oh no I want you to promise me young lady" Raven said picking Haru up and placing her on the deck
"I promise mommy" Haru said hugging her mothers legs Raven smiled at her "Good now lets go"

Haha ha part two of chapter one will come later ^^






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Westice
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commentCommented on: Sun Aug 08, 2010 @ 07:10pm
I like this! It's fun. But could you try to periods at the end of sentences? It was a little hard to tell where one ended and another began.
Also, I always imagined Luffy being with Nami, but hey, your fan fic!
Good job!


commentCommented on: Sun Aug 08, 2010 @ 07:19pm
thanks see that's what I meant with the punctuation thing I never exactly learned when to put a period at the end of a sentance ^^"



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