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If Only..... ~~ If Only ~~ If only I could reach Past the stars To see your face I would, But fear Of leaving you And from my face You'd see not But one solitary tear... Is there a trace This could be wrong? But felt so sure, Not long ago, So cirtain that... If only... I could reach you, I would hold you in my arms, Untill the flow of time Erased your imprint from my mind. And my memmory still pines... For you... If Only....

Posted by: in-the-soup Fri Mar 31, 2006 @ 05:58am

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Commented on: Fri Mar 31, 2006 @ 09:35am


	Imoto san? Are you upset sad ..you never usually write those kind of songs? crying I wanted to get on today to talk to you, but TAFE ruined it, my older sister was on so I couldnt do anything... but still... =( I hope you arent upset, what happened?

Commented on: Fri Mar 31, 2006 @ 11:45am


	"Certain," "Until," and "Memory". Aside from that, it's pretty good, as far as love poetry goes. Slightly disjointed sentences hint at disjointed thoughts, which helps to colour the distress and resignation you're trying to evoke. Knowing a bit about your situation, I get a better image of your feelings; as a standalone poem, though, it might not achieve the communication you're trying to make. No matter; it's only a couple pages away.

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Commented on: Fri Mar 31, 2006 @ 05:55pm


	'Twas simply a trail of thought, wasn't meant to be good or profesional biggrin Was just bored. Yeah I'm a horrid speller sweatdrop No! Onii! Don't be upset! I was just making a poem ^-^

Commented on: Fri Mar 31, 2006 @ 09:48pm


	Your spelling wasnt that bad sister! I know, but you never usually write a poem like that..oh well, you seem happy ^^ thats good!

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Commented on: Fri Mar 31, 2006 @ 11:36pm


	Actually, I always do sweatdrop I just don't share them that offen, but I just felt like writing a journal entry, and this was how it came out ^^

Commented on: Sun Apr 02, 2006 @ 05:49am

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