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My First Novel
I've been writing a story for a while and have recently decided to make it a novel, I'll need lots of input from everyone to make sure it keeps the reader interested.
Chapter 0 (Part 3)
The Three Unknowns


She ran out the door being careful not to tear the door from its hinges. As she got strange stares from friends and shopkeepers she decided to slow down to a brisk walk. 'Can't be all sweaty and out of breath when I arrive there can I?' She quickly got out of sight of her peers and then the clock echoed throughout the village. "Oh no! I'm late." She said as she picked up her pace regardless of what others thought about her. She rounded a corner and then started taking the back alleys, all thanks to Freyr, of course.
She took the last turn and then settle for a normal walk. "Freyr!" She yelled as she waved her arms at him.
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As always comments please. And be as brutal as you can with the comments about mistakes or anything related.





 
 
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