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Round 1 - Mad Science!
Round 1 ~
Zee Scientist eins:
Lyndes

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Dr. Sephiran thought making helper robots would assist with her research on cybernetics...but she didn't realize how difficult it would be to make robots in the first place!
Yikes! Watch out for those loose wires!


Judge 1:
Theme: 8/10
Creativity:8 /10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 27/40

Judge 2:
Lyndes:
Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 29/40

I really enjoy that you went with something a little more off the wall and focused on robots. Streamlining how you presented the robot and creation could have helped some. I can't wait to see how this will go

Round Total: 56/80


Zee Scientist zwei:
Amaethyst

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The brain is a wonderfully adaptive organ, isn't it? It's quite amazing how much information you can put in it.
Children's brains, especially. You see, my own brain was growing old and I needed a new one.

Since then, I've become obsessed with brains. All kinds of brains. But mostly, children's minds.
And especially improving my own brain.


Judge 1:
Amaethyst:
Theme: 7/10
Creativity:7 /10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 4/10
Total: 24/40

Judge 2:
Amaethyst:
Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 27/40

It's an interesting idea, and not totally against the use of the head you have just not sure how I feel about the whole thing with the companion added.

Round Total: 51/80


Zee Scientist drei:
Ophelias Flower
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Cindy stood, looking down at the mess on the floor. she hadn't quite managed to hoist the boy up onto the table and as a result his corpse had fallen and begun to leak all over the floor. cindy frowned. wondering if her father would have found it to be undignified to preform an autopsy whilst kneeling on the floor. he had taught her everything she knew, after all. after a moment of staring and heart felt sigh she got down to her knees and began the grisly business of science.


Judge 1:
Ophelias Flower:
Theme: 6/10
Creativity:7 /10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 27/40

Judge 2:
Ophelias Flower:
Theme: 8/10
Creativity:8 /10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40

I really like the idea of the scary little girl, my only issue with that though the outfit is cute, with the background her legs and arms are hard to find.

Round Total: 57/80


Zee Scientist vier:
Navean
Ich werde der Wissenschaftler Nummer vier werden.

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She came into a lot of money. An inheritance. Along with the money came a very large house. A mansion, really. And the perfect one for her to work on her experiments. She quit her job to focus on her true calling - bodily experiments, both human and animal, and oftentimes both at once.

The experiments grew in number; simultaneously, the mansion fell into disrepair. She had no time to keep up with house work - each room housed a different experiment after all, and those were what needed her full attention.

Despite her bloody work, she never wears gloves as they would get in the way of her delicate procedures. She cannot feel truly connected to her work with such things on.


Judge 1:
Navean:
Theme: 7/10
Creativity:6/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 24/40

Judge 2:
Navean
Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 31/40

With this, I just want to see a little more of something to show off her money, her richness. Give the character more that stands her out from the rest.

Round Total: 55/80


Zee Scientist fünf:
Susue

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"Oh ho ho, I love the creatures of the world. I love, love, LOVE THEM! I love them small and I love them big. I love them furry and I love them scaly. I love them when they're alive and I love them when they're dead-- all the better to play with! But, most of all, I love new creatures, especially when they come alive."


Judge 1:
Susue:
Theme: 8/10
Creativity:9 /10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 36/40

Judge 2:
Susue:
Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35/40

I'm really looking forward to see where else this Scientist goes, I love that you added more layering to items that tend to be large and hard to work with and that face is wonderful.

Round Total: 71/80


Zee Scientist sechs:
Curious Brownies

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Being told she'd never be able to work as a model countless times by many different agencies she stood in her kitchen and thought to herself
"They'd need a model if none others were left."
Her laugh boomed across the kitchen, she may even make herself perfect in doing so, she had always wanted to have a beautiful body and what better way then taking other peoples?


Judge 1:
Curious Brownies:
Theme: 7/10
Creativity:10 /10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 37/40

Judge 2:
Curious Brownies:
Theme: 5/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 26/40

I like that your scientist starts outside of the lab, so your story starts with a slower build up to insanity. However, I'd really loved to have seen some indications of what she will become - little hints of science- y stuff or even a bit more manic expression.

Round Total: 63/80


Zee Scientist sieben:
Lapsis Stella

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Dr. Sephora Gantz spent too much in her office pouring over her research. While she loved to get down and dirty, she did it with style, earning her the nickname, "The Princess Scientist." She couldn't help it if she liked to be fashionable; she was going to change the scientific world.


Judge 1:
Lapsis Stella:
Theme: 7/10
Creativity:8 /10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40

Judge 2:
Lapsis Stella:
Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 34/40

I really enjoyed this entry, appearance wise the only thing that really sticks out is glasses and goggles. The goggles stood out a lot to me from the rest of the avatar.
Round Total: 67/80


Zee Scientist acht:

PuzzBeef

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Issac grinned, the bone saw on one of his many prosthetic limbs whirring. "They said I couldn't do it." He said to the empty room. "But I proved them wrong didn't I? I proved them all wrong." The three newly attached limbs stretched into the air as he laughed insanely.


Judge 1:
Puzzbeef:
Theme: 8/10
Creativity:8 /10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 30/40

Judge 2:
Puzzbeef:
Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 34/40

I love the arm things you have on his back, it looks like he'll be an interesting scientist to watch grow. What's in his hand and along his belt get a bit confusing.

Round Total: 64/80




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High Villainy - Round 6
marwolfer:User Image

The gods had been keeping a careful eye on La Reina de la Muerte. Though she had tricked them and they desired revenge upon her more than anything, they were bound by the laws of the Universe which forbade them from taking back a gift (even a flawed one). They needed a plan to find her weak spot and extort it to their own benefit. Acolmiztli, the god of the underworld, so desired to have her in his realm (her rightful place as he saw it) that he came up with a plan. He would send a secret double agent to La Reina de la Muerte in the form of a lost spirit. He found the spirit of a young girl who had been tortured to death, blind in one eye and forbidden to speak unless spoken to, to enact his plan and sent her off with explicit instructions to befriend La Reina and find her weakness. The spirit, known only as La Alma, approached La Reina after the great ball and besought the immortal to take her into service. La Reina, a cruel creature as always, saw the opportunity to have a slave that could not die, and put La Alma to work. La Reina de la Muerte set to finding more ways to regain her beauty, and all the while, La Alma was reporting back what she saw when she poured the wine.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 34/40
Feedback: I like this entry quite a lot. It's an original concept and the delivery of it was good - I had actually initially given you less for style because I didn't find it that appealing at first but it's really grown on me in the short time it took me to write this far... I don't have much to say about it, except that I really love the concept and your execution was a massive step up from last round.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 34/40
Feedback: This is an interesting entry, I like the idea however the face of the servant sticks out to me. I'd have suggested a mouth or different sort of covering, overall it wasn't too detrimental to the entry.


Theme: 7.5/10
Creativity: 9.4/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 33.9/40

Another impressive work this week. I love how you went with the rich reds and bleak blacks, heading for the basic grays instead. This is a bold choice, having the face fairly complex, but tats/scars/markings not showing on the rest of the avatar. Still, good work.


Total: 101.9

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See Little Bo Peep,
She looks so sweet
With frills and lace all 'round

To think Little Bo Peep,
Would take that leap
For evil her peepers are bound

For Little Bo Peep,
Doesn't just watch her sheep
She spies on the cheery clown


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35/40
Feedback: The face is so mischievous and trouble-making and then the rest of the outfit is this veneer of sugary sweet goodness, which is really great. The only downside to this entry is that, that whole sugary sweetness is so common on gaia these days and it's so easy to execute well, but as you can see from your creativity score, you weren't that affected because you managed to use that common idea in a pretty original way. I like the use of the sheep and the cane a lot and the face, as I said earlier, is excellent.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 37/40

Feedback: I really like what you have done with your entry for several reasons, you've made a pastel avatar that has a unique feel to it and I don't usually like pastel avatars. And you made those sheep look awesome.


Theme: 9.5/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9.8/10
Total: 39.3/40

Hot damn! Normally, pastels don't really work in a scenario such as this, but I am in love with the ensemble here. Truly amazing work from you, Jam. My one nitpick is that there isn't enough white to balance out the rest of the colors. Still, great job!


Total: 114
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What's so great about a tiny little robot?
The simple fact that is reports back to me from time to time... Those idiots at the Christian Convention Center have no idea that I've been keeping tabs on their activities to make my less than legal activities safe from their meddling.
Though I must say... Christian Gal's changing room videos have brought me some supplemental income to finance some new robotic parts...
Maybe I should burn this schematic...Or should I use it to build more? twisted

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 37/40
Feedback: BUILD MORE BUILD MORE BUILD MORE! I love these little robots xD The way you've made them is so creative and original and the way you 'shrunk' it down with the mushroom is really clever. Honestly, the only thing I dislike about this entry is the parchment paper... I don't understand the use of it and it doesn't look very good to me... But other than that, I really like this entry a lot.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 34/40

Feedback: I'll be honest, I wanted to love the little robot based off of the idea of it more then I actually ended up liking it. I wish you hadn't used the parchment thing, without the parchment I think a lot of the little details would have stood out better.


Theme: 7.5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 32.5/40

icon_rofl.gif Your description is really funny man. Now, on to the real meat, which is judging. I can't tell where one part of the robot begins and where another part ends. Dunno if that is a good thing or not, but you kept it nicely done. I am a bit irked that you have this odd mushroom in the avatar itself as well as the scroll. Maybe a better backdrop might have worked. Still, it's nice.


Feedback: 103.5

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He was beautiful. She wanted every inch of his body. She craved to taste him.
He said he wanted her. He told her pretty lies. He begged to lay with her. Secretly, he wanted to fell the beast inside. He had the charms and weapons prepared, blessed by the light of the priestesses. He was ready to kill her. She was oblivious and in love.
But the beast wasn't.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40
Feedback: What I appreciate most about this entry is that there's sufficient expression on the face while still being true to your signature style. The outfit is cohesive and attractive and the use of the mask is interesting, makes it a bit more unique. Overall, a pretty good entry.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40
Feedback: Your spy concept fits very well with your villain, he looks very much a polished dandy feel about him. He however by himself doesn't feel like he has a lot of personality about him to stand on his own.


Theme: 5.5/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 25.5/40

This avatar is, what I have to say, a bit way too simple, even from you. It has a good sense of style, but everything else feels quite weak after looking through for some time. Not one of the best things that have been turned in, but it's pretty much a safe entry.


Total: 87.5

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Ramona Razor:User Image
There were 7 models before 8 was built. 5 was one of the early models. Built with power in mind, the design was very rough. It was only during a practice run a month and a half after it's creation and it failed that it was decommissioned. Now, 5 is simply used as nothing more than a fighter to test out the newer models. However, watching newer models roll out can take a toll, and now that 8 had managed to find 5 and make a few modifications, the mole might just be living in the very machine Gamer Girl created.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 5/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 24/40
Feedback: I can deal with using 2, maybe 3, items from 1 set, if used in a subtle and creative way, but you used 4 poses from the anima and 3 from the nano-c, and that makes up the majority of your avatar. That's neither subtle nor creative and that makes this a bad entry to me. The idea was good to be fair, but you have to understand that it's not even that hard to make a cyborg with different items. I just wish you'd executed it in a creative way.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 26/40

Feedback: I'd have liked to see a bit more from this entry, specifically when it comes to expanding the appearance of your cyborg. I do really like how the tattoos layer on that skin.


Theme: 8.5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32.5/40

Part of me feels as if the Anima item was used oh-so many times in this one that I could lose count. Alas, this mechanized mole of sorts gives off quite the menacing vibe. It's nicely done, especially given how far you've come.


Total: 82.5

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Kitt Koneko:User Image
No one would suspect a cleaning cat to be an information collecting spy for the girl.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40
Feedback: I like this entry a lot, but I feel like I can't give it a really high score because using the cat mod is pretty easy. That said, what's seen inside the cat mod is really good and the concept is nicely creative.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 34/40
Feedback: I have respect for those that can make that cat pose thing work out well for them. An interesting entry overall and pretty cute.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9.7/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39.7/40

Two words: Badass kitty. Now a few more. This can easily be the best entry handed in thus far. Nothing negative to say about it, despite my disdain for use of Catastrophe that was abused so much after the finale. Alas, you've elevated the common house cat into quite a killer. Nicely done.


Total: 106.7




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High Villainy - Round 5
Marwolfer:User Image(click for larger version)
Sabina del Rico was born to the wealthiest family in the entire village. She lived in the lap of luxury up on top of a hill overlooking the village proper. At twenty-three years of age, she was certain of herself and knew what she wanted to be for the rest of her life: beautiful and rich. However, when she looked at her mother (once a great beauty), all she could see was the wrinkles and lines that would some day be her own face. She'd heard La Reina de la Muerte's story from a very young age as every child did in the village; it was a scary bedtime story parents and nannies used to keep the children in line. Sabina knew that the only way that she would be able to avoid the dim future of failing beauty would be to do what the legendary queen had once done. So every night, she besought the heavens to grant her this wish: immortality and eternal youth. Sabina had little care as to who answered her prayer: god or demon did not matter as long as she got her wish.

Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 29/10
Feedback: I think this is such a step back which is very frustrating. The idea behind it is pretty good, not particularly imaginative, but the delivery is just not cohesive. The dress shape, combined with the size of the shoes compared to the hat, create this really, really awkward uncomfortable stance and overall shape. However, I think the eyes portray what you were trying to portray perfectly, so it's not all bad.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40

Feedback (if any): I can feel the character pretty well with this one. I really appreciate the style you have going on there, but there seems to be something a bit off when it comes to balancing the hat with the rest of the avatar.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 6.5/10
Total: 29.5/40

Mar, you took us around the globe with your femme fatale. This one, however, is interesting, given how many stories tell of humans desiring impossible dreams. Albeit the simplicity, it's a good look.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 4/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 24/40

Feedback (if any): I'm a bit disappointed in this. I think you could have done better, style-wise. The story is excellent though.


Total: 112.5

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Jammy:User Image
The Mime so oft forgotten
With powers of her own
Parades and plots in silence
To take the Clown's evil throne

The Clown might steal from stories
But the Mime brings her own to life
So many underestimated
But they will all soon feel her strife


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40
Feedback: HEART THIS! The outfit is really cool and cohesive, the whole thing screams the personality and it's such a creative idea. I love this.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40

Feedback (if any): I really love the look and feel of this with the repeating patterns and the bits of color that pop out from the black and white.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8.5/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 37.5/40

A wonderful bald beauty that uses neon green in a monochrome color scale. I am really not loving how the suspenders layer for the top, but otherwise, this avatar works very nicely. Good work.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9.8/10
Style: 8.5/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36.3/40

Feedback (if any): I adore this, so creepy!


Total: 154

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Ramona Razor:User Image
"Two years away with Master Shikyo, and I come back to find this? Gamer Girl? Please! Absolutely ridiculous," Little Sister muttered, throwing her stolen newspaper down and fingering the grip of her knife. The headline had read "GAMER GIRL STRIKES THE BARON," and this just simple irritated her. Still, a small, vicious smile crept over her lips as she thought of all the 'fun times' she had and could have, before quickly changed her mind about the article in the paper. "Looks like it's time visit my lovely, dorky, big sister. See if she is still so obsessed over her stupid little science projects. One big family reunion."

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 29/40
Feedback: I enjoy the concept of this far more than the execution. I'm not matching nazi, but the different shades of red right next to each other look like failed matching and make it really unappealing to me. If you'd gone for a more non-matching approach, and used different colours, this would be so much better and that non-matching colour scheme would enhance the theme more as well. The face is also kind of bothersome. You talk about a smile but you used these pouty pink lips that contradict your theme and the eyes are completely dead. However, I like the japanese anime vibe that I get from the pistolera and the weapons.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 28/40

Feedback (if any): Nice avatar, the theme is solid but nothing really makes it stand out. The repeating stripes aren't bad but the colors for me leave a bit to be desired.


Theme: 6.2/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7.5/10
Total: 30.7/40

Even though it feels plain and ordinary, the avatar's not so bad. However, the catch with this one is that I need to rely so much on the story just to get what you're trying to convey here. Nice colors through and through along with the stripes.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36/40

Feedback (if any): This is incredibly fitting. No feedback.


Total: 123.7

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Kitt Koneko: User Image
He came from a poor family, so when the accident happened when he was a child, most of his body had to be replaced with expired parts found around the factory.
He was taunted and ridiculed for the way he looked growing up. No one loved him after the additions. He seeks to destroy humanity for the hurt they have caused him. This included that cyborg girl that that doctor kept as his pet. She never played with him when he was recovering from the surgeries.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 34/40
Feedback: This is MUCH better! It's cohesive, visually appealing and has this really cool creepiness that shows a strong personality and a strong character. I don't have much more to say. You didn't score even higher because it's not spectacular, but it's a very good entry >w<


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 34/40

Feedback (if any): Interesting item combination and I'm fond of the grungy look.


Theme: 9.7/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39.7/40

I have nothing negative to say here, Kitt. The colors work well with each other and it works as a whole.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 33/40

Feedback (if any): I really like this, but I feel like more could be added to give it more of a creepy feel.


Total: 140.7

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Max:User Image

Deirithid, the demon of fear, desires the amulet for his own evil plans.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 37/10
Feedback: Another very good entry from you. I really, really like this avatar a lot. It's so unique and creative. In fact, the whole world you've created is very creative, the whole fantasy vibe, I really, really like it. This avatar looks so evil, I especially like the use of the scythe and the head spikes, and the face as well. The layering on the legs is cool but those stockings throw is off a bit. Other than that though, it's really great.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 38/40

Feedback (if any): Awesome avatar - I love the repeat gold patterns you have going on there and the textures are just wonderful.


Theme: 4/10
Creativity: 5.5/10
Style: 4/10
Overall Impression: 2.8/10
Total: 16.3/40

Okay. Here's the thing. You got some nice colors throughout the avatar. Problem is how it was executed. The feet feel clunky followed by the chest, yet everything else feels streamlined. Just a horrible mess in my eyes, honestly.


Theme: 5/10
Creativity: 5/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 20/40

Feedback (if any): Very disappointing Max. You could have done much better.


Total: 111.3

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Old Man Vee: User Image

That Vee guy's a friggin wimp... I'll show him if he ever shows his face in these parts... Dude doesn't even fight his own fights...
Viggo takes a swig of his cola and adjusts his grip on his axe.
Oh yeah... I'll show him... Chop him up and make him look like one of his minions... Yeah... YEAH!

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36/40
Feedback: You know I like this entry xD I think you portrayed the idea of an upcoming villain perfectly. He's clearly evil but just not as well established which is exactly what was required. I have nothing else to say, except I like this entry overall a lot, the whole vibe of it.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40

Feedback (if any): It's an interesting avatar...but it almost feels like your guy might be too hardcore...with the amount of damage done to his face I'm surprised he's able to stand. It's a well put together avatar though, and there is a very scary feel to the whole thing.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 7.5/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7.5/10
Total: 33/40

It's gritty, it's grungy...oh wait! It's you! Wonderfully executed this round, but I'm starting to wonder if there's more than just what you've been showing. Are there more sides from the mind of Vee? Nevertheless, good work here.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 2/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 27/40

Feedback (if any): This fits very well, but he's just so... ugly and messy.


Total: 127

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Taylor struggled futility against the magical wards that held him in place. His own magic wasn't nearly sufficient to break free and eventually Seanchain would return to her base, find an intruder... and that'd be that. Death would need a new mortal champion. Hopefully Seanchain would make his death fast, if he were lucky. He cursed his carelessness and studied his surroundings, hoping to see some means of escape. There. In the corner of the rafters – a glint of white. He wasn't alone.

The woman – or perhaps girl, he thought – flipped down from the ceiling, landing heavily on the cement floor just a yard away. She moved with an unnatural grace, an ease that spoke of a lifetime of training - she was dangerous, no doubt, underneath that disarming exterior. The two studied each other, a calculating look in her eyes. Taylor decided he didn't like that look.

“Here's the deal,” she said, “I get you free. You help me bring down Seanchain.”

“Deal,” Taylor replied without hesitation, not wanting to question his good fortune, “But who are you?”

And her return smile was distinctively malicious. What devil had he just bargained with? “I'm a former apprentice,” she said, “Seanchain tried to kill me and thinks me dead. I intend to return the favor. Now, let's see to these wards...”

Theme: 5/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 24/40
Feedback: My main problem is that this doesn't look at all like a villain, but I wasn't sure how much I wanted to penalise you for, for that fact. It's not a bad avatar, it's pretty cool. I like the head, but visually, the fact that you have a very simple head and minimalistic feet/shins compared to a heavily and somewhat messily layered torso, it's not very appealing. The face is sort of blank as well. I get that it's a wannabe villain, but your story made her sounds so much more cheeky and evil and caniving, and I see none of that in this avatar.


Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 26/40

Feedback (if any): The story carries this avatar too much for my taste, I'd liked to seen more of an expression on her face at the very least. The story is very well written, I just don't feel that the avatar really fits with the character portrayed.


Theme: 5/10
Creativity: 5/10
Style: 4.5/10
Overall Impression: 4/10
Total: 18.5/40

This avatar, honestly, feels like a half-finished work in progress. Only thing that works here is the matching, but something feels off here...


Creativity: 6/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 31/40

Feedback (if any): I like this but I don't feel like you used your full creativity on this.


Total: 99.5

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lovest harding:User Image

The beast was an addiction.
Before her were countless women, all young for as long as the beast was with them. Most were dead, but one still craved the youth and beauty. She still needed the power and magic she no longer had. And she'd do anything to get it back.

Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 29/40
Feedback: I like this avatar, but it doesn't look evil enough for me. The outfit is quite villainous, and adheres to your quite sexy theme of your original villain, but the hair is too cute and the face is really soft and calm and not villainous at all.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 29/40

Feedback (if any): The character herself looks almost grandmotherly while the clothing feels like something a more hardened woman would wear. I like the aged woman wanting the youth back concept, I just feel her face would have shown the character better with a different expression.


Theme: 7.5/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 32.5/40

I love this avatar and even without the story, it feels cohesive. Not much to say about it except, good job.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40

Feedback (if any): Absolutely fantastic for this round. No suggestions. Great job!


Total: 130.5




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High Villainy - Round 4
marwolfer:User Image (Click image to see larger original)
La Reina de la Muerte barely escaped from the priestess with her life. All of her riches and treasures had been melted in the heat of the fire spells used against her, but the immortal queen had managed to escape into the forest. She had to keep to the shadows, but even as such she managed to hear rumors about a mystical device supposedly kept by the chief that granted one wish to the owner. The townspeople, assuming their terror was dead, were so thankful that they threw giant masquerade ball. Knowing that the chief would be there and hopeful for the rumor to be true, La Reina de la Muerte knew that she must take the chance to acquire this one item that could restore her youth... and help her escape from the priestess's clutches. So stealing the necessary garments and items for her disguise, La Reina de la Muerte attended the masked ball, shadowing the chief the entire night.

marwolfer
Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35/40
Feedback: This is by far my favourite entry of yours so far. It's cohesive and visually appealing - especially like the ribbon motif you've used - and I like the dark, macabre atmosphere the mask and the outfit overall create. Sure, the background isn't the most creative I've ever seen, but it does the job adequately. Also (this is a positive), the description wasn't necessary... not because it was poorly written or didn't make sense or whatever, but because I could see the situation and theme and whatever in the actual avatar without reading the description. Overall, I'm very pleased with this entry 3nodding



Theme: 9 /10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40
Feedback: I'm amused by the skeleton hiding as a skeleton, the scene is set up nicely and I can tell what's going on by what you've created. It's nice but I feel the cincher disrupts the flow of the dress some in comparison to your other item choices.


Theme: 6.5/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6.5/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 25/40

Feedback (if any): -sigh- What happened to you? After that climax last round, it's as if you crashed and burned in this one. I'm afraid the only thing working for this entry is your backdrop. Everything else doesn't really work here.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 30/40

Feedback (if any): You made this mask look good, but I still don't think it was the best choice of mask for this entry.


Total: 123

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Jamais Changeant:User Image
How better to fight the meddling fool?
Than to pull a real witch out with her tool.
Armed with a wand and dressed for the ball
I sent her in to give the clown a call.

At the masquerade where the clown will play
The witch will steal those juggling balls today.
Then I am free to toy with the stories
And she'll have nothing left of her former glory.

(In case it isn't clear enough...as it doesn't seem to be for some judges. YES, my villain pulls story book characters out from their stories. In this case she's using the Wicked Witch to steal the magic juggling balls that my hero uses to fix what my villain messes up in stories.)


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40
Feedback: Urrrrrm the disclaimer was unnecessary, considering I worked it out/you explained it when I was actually confused (because it wasn't clear), and a little condescending. The difference between this entry and the last entry that was pulled from a book is that the description in this, while entertaining, is also clear and concise and makes the pulling from the book clear. Visually, I'm a little underwhelmed, I think, mainly by the hat and hair that aren't visually appealing to me. The rest of the outfit, I really like. It's cohesive, flows nicely (aside from the sash) and just looks good.



Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35/40
Feedback: This is an overall lovely avatar, I'm a sucker when it comes to green though. I like that you brought all your items together so they flow like they were meant to be all one piece.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9.8/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39.8/40

Feedback (if any): My word...this is amazing stuff! The way your flow just blends together as one? I am floored on how complex everything feels, yet it is so simple. Very impressive work this round.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 38/40

Feedback (if any): I really like concept of this.


Total: 145.8
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lovest harding:User Image

How she felt so beautiful in those gowns. She remembered being young, dressing up and dancing with the boys. She missed feeling so elegant.
The beast would shame her for such thoughts, but it remained silent. It would come soon, though. She had mere hours until she reached the man she had come to meet. Hundreds of minutes until she could feel a hot body. Thousands upon thousands of seconds until the beast would have a fool to devour.
No man would try to rip her power away and succeed. Not even a viscount...

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 28/40
Feedback: The dress, or rather, the whole outfit itself is really nice. What I gather from the story, this character is essentially a trapped pawn of your villain's, who goes to entice men into captivity for the villain, and the outfit is a nice reflection of this characters confinement. The wraps and belted details and whatnot, are innovative in their symbolism of her situation. However, I am completely let down by the head and the face. There's hardly any expression on the face and the hair is really informal and as far from seductive as you can. I'm not saying I want a super detailed hat and all that crap, but an expression in the face that either expressed the job this character has to do, or how disdain for doing it, paired with a more elegant hairstyle would've done wonders for me.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 29/30
Feedback: I really love the layering on the dress and the textures you used on it. But compared to the details on the body your face and head look empty. A more fancy hairstyle and a bit of make up or something for her face would have really made this entry shine.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 9.5/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8.5/10
Total: 33/40

Feedback (if any): I applaud your use of interesting shapes, textures and colors for this work, but maybe some makeup to the face would have accented your look a bit more.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 5/10
Style: 6.5/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 25.5/40

Feedback (if any): This entry lacks character, she seems somewhat like a statue and less like a villain.


Total: 115.5
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Old Man Vee:User Image

Men of stature, ladies of couture... Useless whelps all of them.
Broken machines and dead bodies gave you as much power as a pile of money... Or did it?
Ahhhh there was the Baron... His guard equipped with strong weapons... His home defended by a a shield which sat behind an EMP field... A clever b*****d to be sure...
Vee grinned, At least the man had great wine.
"This wine is delicious" And I've much to learn from you... twisted

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40
Feedback: Like... I don't even know... you can't get better than this. Aside from that avatar of yours that you know is my favourite, this is my favourite avatar of yours ever, in or out of the competition. The personality is soo strong, the character is amazing, the outfit is appealing and cohesive and very visually appealing and the background is so, so creative and cool. LOVE THIS SO MUCH.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40
Feedback: This is awesome, I love everything about this avatar and the story is wonderful as well xD your villain monologuing really makes it stand out.


Theme: 9.4/10
Creativity: 9.4/10
Style: 9.7/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 38.5/40

Feedback (if any): You got some good layering here, especially with the way your Forteanagoria is set up to represent an eerie setting. The one fault here is that I had to depend a lot on the story just to get what is being conveyed here. Irregardless, this is pretty solid.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40

Feedback (if any): If I could have given 11/10 for all of the above I would have. Excellent job Vee. I'm very impressed
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Total: 158.5
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Arizona Ranger:User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Ah. A ball, is it? This is the perfect chance to get a few things done. I myself will not be attending, no. My man Arroyo is perfect for the job. Especially considering what I'm after. The Lord's wife is the one that holds the real power in this kingdom, and there's a man in this kingdom who knows everything about her. Some say blackmail is above those who use magic, but branching out was never a bad thing, was it? All I'm sending him with is a bribe. A certain rare potion and an enchanted pocketwatch. Child's play, really. Little does the poor sap know that the potion in question has a bit of an extra kick to it... The "esteemed" Lady might even thank me for that little addition.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 31/40
Feedback: I can't deny the odd personality in this avatar - it's very strong and evident - but I can't help but be put off by the strict matching... not only is it distracting, but it doesn't make much sense to me. Surely if your villain is sending this character in with a bribe for whoever, they'd make them somewhat discreet. It's not a huge issue though, as you can see from the good score you got.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 27/40
Feedback: This avatar feels a bit flat to me...I think the story confused me to Arroyo's personality a bit. It sounds as if he's suppose to be a casanova but the avatar is dressed more like a jester. Overall the story and avatar just feel disjointed. I did find the blackmail aspect of the story to be an interesting way for your villain to work.


Theme: 8.5/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 26.5/40

Feedback (if any): Interesting garb for a baron's ball, but it's giving off the vibe of costume instead of couture. Not really working for me this round.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 4/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 25/40

Feedback (if any): This entry matches too much to fit the theme I think. Also, I think the story could have explained the character more than it did.


Total: 109.5


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Kiddo Seanchain: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

The wonderful thing about having two lifetimes to live is that Seanchain had plenty of time to amass a multitude of experience, contacts, fake identities, and of course: clothing. Certainly, the dress was a bit dated in some ways, but this was a high society ball and eccentricity was expected. Seanchain could certainly deliver that. While there was nothing to be done about her pale once-dead skin and dull eyes or the tattoos, there were always wigs. And makeup. And lies.

"Me?" she purred demurely, batting her eyes at the baron, "I'm a tattoo artist. Quite exclusive. I've based my own artwork off a Mongolian text about death rituals. Oh, you have the original of that book!? My, what a coincidence! Well, you simply can't tell me that and not let me see it, can you? Shall we take our leave to your private art collection..?"


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 28/40
Feedback: There's nothing overtly awful about this, but it's average at best, and the layering of the whole outfit looks awkward and unappealing to me. I like the sense of personality... and if I'm honest, as an overall avatar it's not that bad which is why you got the score you did, but I personally don't like it that much.



Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 30/40
Feedback: I really like the dress and the story is interesting but nothing makes it really stand out to me as an entry.


Theme: 9.7/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39.7/40

Feedback (if any): First off, let me give you props for using some of my favorite item combinations ever. Secondly, that hair and dress. It is really gorgeously put together. My one fault is that there isn't enough cream to make your darker colors pop out. Fantastic work this round.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9.5/10
Total: 37.5/40

Feedback (if any): Great job, no feedback.


Total: 135.2
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Max Diesel:User Image

Lord Voulixi III, a man very loyal to me, will meet with the contact at the ball. A quick exchange of cigars. Bring me the cigar, the map contained within will lead me to the amulet I seek.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35/40
Feedback: It's not the most creative entry ever, but that's about the only bad thing about it. The outfit itself is imaginative and cohesive and the personality is pretty strong. I don't have much else to say xD I like it!


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36/40
Feedback: Noble that made a deal with a devil, I like it. The flow isn't bad but I'm not too fond of the pants with this, but they don't stick out to me too badly.


Theme: 9.7/10
Creativity: 9.4/10
Style: 8.4/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 34.5/40

Feedback (if any): You're really running the gamut, given how it's already round 4 and you're light years ahead of the game. Some aspects have fallen flat in this ensemble though. Nevertheless, we can only see what happens next.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39/40

Feedback (if any): Great job making the character look smooth Max!


Total: 144.5
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Kitt Koneko:User Image
She'd gotten her hair done and some pretty clothes. Maybe now she could find some friends to love her at this event.

Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40
Feedback: I actually like this quite a lot. It's very consistant with your villain and the dress you've created is creative, cohesive and very appropriate for your character. Despite the robotics, it's quite a sweet avatar, but aside from the elegant ball setting, I'm failing to see how this fits with the specific idea of the round... I don't understand why her being there is benefitting her evil scheme, because she is supposed to be a villain who is only there to benefit her evil scheme...


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40
Feedback: I find this entry to be very cute, however even with the makeover she stands out quite a bit which cuts down on her inconspicuousness at the party. I'd liked to have heard a bit more about what she plans to do with these 'friends' once she finds them...as it is suppose to be part of her evil scheme in some manner.


Theme: 4/10
Creativity: 7.5/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 22.5/40

Feedback (if any): Ohh...ouch. Looking at this piece was rather painful, given how each entry you've been turning in has steadily been declining in quality. What happened? At the first day, you were that star pupil I wanted to keep an eye on and place in the honor roll. Now...I'll be surprised if you can make it to the semi-finals. Only saving grace this round is the layering of the torso. That's all I'm afraid.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 36/40

Feedback (if any): I think this looks great, but I think if I saw this at a ball, I would be a bit suspicious. Maybe a mask would have helped hide her identity a little. <3


Total: 122.5
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Ramona Razor:User Image
"I know, it hurts Mommy too, but it has to be this way. I'll call if I need you though, so be good," she said, before placing a kiss on Hands' cold metal, and turning to leave. It was a risk, but it had to be taken. No technology, leaving her precious creations back at home, Gamer Girl went it alone to meet the Baron. She only had the set of poisons she had engineered tucked away safely and nothing else.
Bribe to get in, check. Blend into the party guests, check. Get close to the Baron, check. Half way through the party, and only two hiccups (one in the bathroom with a woman commenting on that 'crazy tech chick' and the other with a butler that thought he recognized her), but the blond charms and the mass amounts of booze the Baron was consuming seemed to be working in her favor. Real luck was struck when the night grew late and the Baron moved to drink alone.
"Mr. Baron is all alone? Care if I join?"
"For you, my dear-" hiccup "-anythin'."
"Anything?" she asked, moving into his lap. Her hand slid around the bottle that he held, and with a quick jerk, loud smash, and sharp broken glass against the throat, she had the upper hand. "Well, I'll be needing the key to your big, fancy nuclear reactor, if you don't mind."
His big, glassy eyes went wide with fear, before narrowing. "You can't kill me."
The other hand was just as quick as the other to pull a needle filled with poison and position it millimeters from his neck. "I can't? Funny, I thought I could. But I'll give you a choice. Give me the key or I kill you with this bottle and let you die slowly, Mr. Baron."
His hand shook slightly as he reached for the chain around his neck and slid the key off, before handing it over. She grabbed it and stuffed it away out of sight, before sticking the needle in his neck. Again, his eyes went wide, but all she did was smile. "Thank you," was all she murmured as she slid off his lap and left the room, locking the doors quietly behind her.

Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40
Feedback: The story is probably the best part of this entry. I really enjoyed it. But that's not to say the entry is bad, but it definitely relied on the story to explain what was going on. The face is bothering me most in this. The eye sparkle completely ruins the expression those eyes can give... I really don't understand why you used it... and the outfit itself looks more like a waitress to me, which wouldn't blend in if she was supposedly masquerading as an attendee. The entry would work better if you had disguised her intentionally as a waitress. I like the creative method of getting what you want though.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40
Feedback: The story and avatar here feel a bit separated...with the touch of seduction in the story I felt like she should have worn a more slinky outfit. As it is now her outfit is nice but she looks as if she might be stealthing in as the butler.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7.5/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30.5/40

Feedback (if any): Ramona,you're really playing it safe this round. Where's that sense of style and snark that were displayed in Gamer Girl? It's okay, but her outfit really don't work so well for a 'ball'. This will do for now.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 28/40

Feedback (if any): I think this looks great, but the overall flow of the avatar bothers me. She seems a bit too chunky.


Total: 118.5



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High Villainy - Round 3
marwolfer:User Image
The local people were sick of the oppression of La Reina de la Muerte. They wanted to keep their gold, their lives, and their sanity. At the behest of the people, their leader wrote a last ditch letter to a secret organization for help. No one expected a reply, but their hopeful prayers were answered a week later when a stranger walked into town: a priestess of the Order of the Ósea. They were wanderers, traveling to places that needed their guidance and help. The Order was known for it's use of skulls and fire. This priestess was like the rumors had foretold: silent because of a mandatory vow of silence, mysterious, and powerful. The townsfolk gathered as she neared the cave of La Reina de la Muerte and held their breath as she disappeared into the darkness...

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40

Feedback: I like what you have here, it's a nice combination and the face has superb layering.


Theme: 9.5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 35.5/40
Comments:Mar,you've elevated the role of a priestess into something just mesmerizing.I'm getting Aztec warrior from you and...wow.Would have loved to see more golds/oranges in the avatar,but great work nonetheless.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 35/40

Feedback (if any): I really like this, and the story fit very well.


Total: 103.5
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Kitt Koneko:User Image
"You say there's another rogue hunk of junk messin' with my city? I'll take that thing apart, no problem."

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 31/40

Feedback: Very much a hero from an unexpected source, but considering your villain it works for me. Nice feel.


Theme: 5.5/10
Creativity: 7.5/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 27/40
Comments:I really admire your eye piece and it left a lot of your fellow contenders lost in the dust...only for said inspiration.However,I'm afraid you are the one being left in said dust.Pretty good hero idea though.



Theme: 8.5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7.5/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40

Feedback (if any): I feel like outside items or a background would have added more to this. As it is, it seems a bit plain and -obvious- for the theme of this round.


Total: 90
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Arizona Ranger: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

The Head Mage told me today that a new hero had arrived in the city to deal with our little wannabe warlock 'threat'. I asked him why we needed new blood to take care of the issue when we were doing just fine on our own. Turns out the local baron doesn't have much confidence in us after all. The man he hired is known as 'Journeyman'. That's it. His name's as much of a mystery to himself as it is to us, apparently. He's a seer. I thought that the seers had gone all but extinct when they moved across the continent and into the caves travellers call the 'Howling Abyss' hundreds of years ago.

Instead of perishing, they thrived. And when I say thrived, I mean evolved. From what this Journeyman's said, they're all blind. Using spirits to guide them safely negates the need to physically see, and ages in the darkest cave system this side of Orion's Valley can't be good for the eyes either.

Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 26/40

Feedback: I really like how your giving your background a rich feel with your stories. I however didn't feel that the character represented quite summed up this mystical race of Seers, he looks very young and has nice clothing but doesn't feel very mystical.


Theme: 9.5/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9.75/10
Total: 39.25/40
Comments:A great take on mages,especially since it gives off a "Legend of Zelda" feel.Shigeru Miyamoto would be proud to use this in his next game if he saw this.Wonderful work this week!I do have an irking with it and said irking is due to the lack of dark blue in the avatar.



Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 27/40

Feedback (if any): This entry disappointed me a little. He just doesn't look believable.


Total: 92.25
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Jamais Changeant: User Image

I'll sing you a song
Full of love and great cheer
You'll all sing along
As I twirl the balls here

They sparkle and shine
The balls that spin round
She's stuck in a bind
Till they come tumbling down

The words, they will drift
And fix what she broke
The clown that went bad
Is no match for good folk


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40

Feedback: I don't care for clowns as a rule (as in I think they are creepy and freak me out >.&gt wink . But your entry is super cute and actually made me smile.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 32/40
Comments:It's shiny,it's sparkly and it juggles!This reminds me of something from the dollar shop of sorts.[Not an insult,but a compliment]However,I do give props for making this cheery confection into something quite stunning.Great styling and good luck,Jam.


Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 4/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 23/30

Feedback (if any): I don't like this clown... an evil face or something would have made this more realistic, even if it was only -slightly- evil.


Total: 88
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Max Diesel:User Image

"Heard you folks were beginning to witness strange happenings around these parts. Late night horrors, children disappearing, and now churches are being destroyed and the priests found hanging upside down on crosses, bled to death.... and the blood is missing? I'd say you have a demon in your midst, and just so happens I enjoy killing demons."

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36/40

Feedback: I'm partial to a well done bad a** avatar.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9.75/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9.75/10
Total: 37.5/40
Comments:Great colors,very macho in appearance.You seem to be working at the docks while trying to get to the bottom of this problem.I have nothing negative to say about this.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35/40

Feedback (if any): This is an alright entry, it just seems to be a bit obvious for the theme.


Total: 108.5
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lovest harding:User Image

Beasts and witches. The priestess knew her enemies well. Born from a witch burned in salvation, she knew what it was like to crave as they did. But now she would see their end. No soul should be lost to the Beast on its way to the afterlife. No witch should be granted the taste of flesh. No being held more power than the light, the light she would use to vanquish the evil.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 10 /10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39

Feedback: I really love this, it's simple and has delicate details and layering. Just lovely.


Theme: 9.5/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39.5/40
Comments:While this feels simple,I am getting so much complexity just by staring into her eyes.Gorgeous.One irking though...Maybe an anklet on her bare leg would have worked.



Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 38/40

Feedback (if any): I really like this entry Lovest. It was hard not giving you all 10's but it'd be a bit biased, and I try not to be a biased judge. Excellent job.


Total: 116.5

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Old Man Vee:User Image (click image to see full size entry)

STOP YOU FOUL CRIMINAL!
GOD PUT YOU ON THIS EARTH TO BETTER IT, IF YOU DON'T FOLLOW HIS PATH.... WELL I'LL SHOW YOU THE WEIGHT OF THE GOOD BOOK.
BY SMASHING YOU WITH IT!

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 37/40

Feedback: I love the characterization.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8.5/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 36.5/40
Comments:From a young lady emerges a femme fatale...with a book.Very interesting take on the hero side of the hero vs. villain area.I am lost for words on what to say here.Maybe a hairclip to cover the dark green bit in her hair would have worked.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 31/40

Feedback (if any): This definitely seems like a hero type, but something is off about it, and that's why I made my demerits where I did.


Total: 104.5
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Ramona Razor:User Image
>ENTRY#2074<
>NAME - 0008<
>MESSAGE - Today is the eight year anniversary of my creation.
>>It also is the six year anniversary of my quest to stop my creator.
>>The robbery at the bank has only solidified my determination.
>>Creator or not
>>She must be stopped.
>>She must be ended.
>>And I, Eight am the only one to complete the job.
>END MESSAGE<

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 37/40

Feedback: Very cute, she looks very seamless in design.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7.5/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 33.5/40
Comments:Ramona,you know how to make it work to your favor with this computerized crime stopper.However,I kinda wish there was more to it.Nicely done though.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40

Feedback (if any): Perfect, absolutely no flaws. Great job Razor!

Total: 110.5
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Erroar: User Image (click image to see full sized entry)

"Ow, hai there!
My name is FeminMan

When Madame and I were still in highschool we were, well... lovers.
He was my everything, my honeypie, my sugarplum, my studmuffin.
Until he began to change... He slowly turned into a cranky little monster.
I knew something was wrong, something wasn't right.

A few weeks later we broke up, Madame told me he never wanted to see me again.
I was crushed. I thought love was just a lie...
A few years after that unfortunate event I was hit by lightning.
It was a true miracle that I survived that day, but even more miraculous were the new powers I've had gained.

I now have the power to walk over the clouds, manipulate them and use them in my advantage.
I use these powers to retore all love in the world and fight for equality.
Because you know, no matter gay, straight or bi, we were all born this way."

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40

Feedback: Amusing and nice to look at all around. I like how you blended the clothing with the body coloring.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 40/40
Comments:This is probably my favorite hero this round with the color palette as well as a reinvention of the classic musketeer from literature.Very modernized,yet high glamor.I'm in love with this!


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36/40

Feedback (if any): I like this a lot but I don't think it fits the theme very well.


Total: 108
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Kiddo Seanchain:User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

It wasn't that Taylor found his day job boring – it's just that his after-hours work was so much more exciting. Certainly, doing autopsies for the city police had a certain amount of macabre glamor to it, but in the end – be it by drowning or shooting or automobile – a corpse was a corpse. Now the ones that got up after they'd been brought down... those were a different story.

Death called them runners. People that by means magical or otherwise sought to escape him and prolong their lives. And Death being, well, Death, he was tremendously busy and simply didn't have the time to chase everyone. That's where Taylor came in. And he loved it. A bit of magic, a bit of an unregistered gun, and a whole lot of precise anatomical knowledge and some fine-bladed knives had helped him bring down the most determined and dangerous of runners.

But this Seanchain... this might be different. He'd seen a number of bodies come through because of her and Death was worried. Not much worried Death. Still, he had to try and bring her down and stop whatever it was she was plotting, or else die trying. It wouldn't be so bad if that happened – at least he was on good terms with the reaper.

(Longer version of story here [X])

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39/40

Feedback: I really like him, as a character he feels very strong and his look is believable and interesting.


Theme: 9.5/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9.8/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39.3/40
Comments:Even though it took you till the last minute to formulate this avatar entry,this truly works.Great colors,great outfit and it feels very well done.Good work!


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 36/40

Feedback (if any): I like this, doctors are good hero's and yours is very different from everyone else's. Great job.


Total: 114.3




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High Villainy - Round 2
Max Diesel: User Image

Robbing the king's treasure chamber.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 28/40

Feedback: This is tough because I loved your first round entry so much and I think you ruined it with this. The avatar base is great and I like the attire you gave him, but the visual appeal was kinda ruined for me by the layering of the hood and the horns. You scored highly on theme because it was clear to me what you were going for, and you rightly assumed you didn't need a description to enhance it, but the background is cluttered and messy and puts me off a lot. I do like the folk-tale vibe it has, but you let yourself down by concentrating so much on theme and disregarding visual appeal too much.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 29/40

Feedback (if any): I like the concept but there are a few things about the avatar that bother me. They background is filled up in such a way that it doesn't really seem to have anywhere to go and looks cluttered.


Total: 57

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Kitt Koneko:
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"Just need to find four more bodies to sell to the factory before I can buy it," she said with a wide smile dragging the stolen carcass towards the tall building.

Theme: 5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 25/40

Feedback: My first impression convinced me this entry was better than it actually is because as a stand-alone avatar, it's not at all bad, in fact I really like it, but your entry last round and your description were very detrimental to your score. Your means of acquiring the money are creative - selling bodies - so you scored well there, but your score for theme is as low as it is because I'm really confused by the gaps you left. How do you get the bodies? Are you digging them up, grave-robbing, or are you killing people and selling their bodies, and if it's the latter, how is that stealing? Also, what kind of factory buys dead bodies? There's just not enough clarity for me. While visually, your avatar is quite appealing, I'm put off by the lack of consistency. Your entry for the first round was cutesy and pretty, but then the contrast of the robotics and the poison made it really creepy and evil. The outfit this round is so scarce and a bit slutty. It's not, to me, the same personality, and since you didn't justify that or explain it, I had to dock points.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40

Feedback (if any): With this avatar I could see her dragging this body through the dark up to some big hulking factory. I know your not fond of backgrounds, but I'd liked to have seen one here...or perhaps just a few more details. Blood splatter - if she's been killing her victims, or maybe some graveyard dirt.


Total: 55

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Old Man Vee:

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Baron, "What is this?! Let... Let go of me!"
The baron stood agape in horror, dead things holding him in place as Vee made off with armloads of gold.
Vee, "Well Baron, I thank you for your investment in my enterprise... Farewell."
Baron, "YOU VILE THIEF!"

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 38/40

Feedback: I really, really love this entry. The theme, or rather, the situation, you depicted in the story is so, so clear in the avatar, it sort of made the story redundant had it not been for the interaction element which really enhanced the entry. The outfit is nothing special, but it's appropriate for the character. What I like most is how dynamic the pose is and how expressionate the face is. Overall, a really great entry.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39/40

Feedback (if any): I really really like this, not much more to say about it. It's very well done, I love how the skeleton hands line up as if they are grabbing him that and the face seal just make this look wonderful to me.


Total: 77

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marwolfer:User Image
La Reina de la Muerte never had need of going out and finding fine frippery for herself. She was robbing the locals by simply scaring them into providing tribute to her. The cave she inhabits overflows with fine furs, silks, wines, and most importantly gold. If their peace offerings appease this restless immortal, their lives are spared. If not... well, she will rob them of more than their possessions: she takes their peace of mind and even some of their lives.

Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 28/40

Feedback: I'm a bit conflicted with this avatar. It's interesting to look it and I really like the whimsicality of it but I'm a little bit confused by the story - I don't understand how it's stealing if they're giving her the money... even if it is because they're scared. Visually, the avatar is very nice, which is probably the strongest aspect of the avatar. It's very detailed and richly coloured which enhances the wealthy theme but I don't think it has the clarity it needed to score higher on theme. It looks good, but to me it just looked like a skeleton in a tomb. There's no evil personality here and it relies entirely on the story to explain how you robbed those riches, and as I said before, that's not even that clear in the story itself. So, overall, I'm really conflicted with the entry. I like it visually, but I don't think it achieves what you intended or what the round required so I'm caught between priorities.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35/40

Feedback (if any): Nicely done, the layering is very nice and you really did well with that skeleton base. The cave background was a nice touch. It's another far push from robbery as a way to gaining money, it does fit with your villain well however so I didn't take too much off for it.




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Ramona Razor:User Image

After planting a mind-control chip on one guard and knocking out and stealing another guard's uniform, it was a piece of cake. "First day here?" "Oh, yes. I'm just a little nervous." "You'll be fine." Slip past the tellers by acting coy, telling the control guard what to do, where to bring her, there was only one obstacle left; the vault. The only question was to do it the fun, messy way or the easy, boring way? It took a matter of seconds to decide that. Hooking up the hand drill and finding the weak point of the lock itself, the fun, messy way was definitely the way to go about it. She broke through the door, disabled any and all alarms, and then proceeded to load up on as much of the green stuff as possible. "A tip for helping me out, big boy. Oh, and help yourself to what's left," she said, as she stuffed a fist full of money down the front of his pants. Making a small exit for herself with the carefully packed C4 bomb, it was an easy escape for Gamer Girl as well. "Hm, what to buy first? A girl can never go wrong with a good shopping spree."

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 34/40

Feedback: I don't have much to say about this entry, which is usually a good thing. The theme is very clear and precise, the girl has a lot of personality which is enhanced by the interesting and entertaining story, and while the design of the outfit is a little safe and boring, I can't fault you too much for being authentic and sticking to your theme, so I didn't xD Overall, a good entry.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 34/40

Feedback (if any): The scene is set up well, and she's very cute and you portrayed her personality very well.


Total: 68


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Arizona Ranger:User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

It was Alerio's first- and last- day on the job as treasury guard. After a valiant struggle, he was cornered by the odd tendrils that had ripped through his regular, human colleagues. Possessing no fire spells, and his other magics having no effect on dark spells of this magnitude, he gathered any remaining strength and fired one last arcane blade at the attacker, catching the warlock's lackeys from behind. He blacked out before he even saw his final spell's effect.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36/40

Feedback: I really like this avatar. The character and personality of the dude is so strong, and the outfit is visually appealing. Like Vee's, it's interestingly dynamic in it's expression and pose. The background could afford to be a bit more unique but it does it's job in that it shows what the villain is stealing and technically doing any more to it is unnecessary. The methods your villain is using to do the stealing is unclear in the avatar itself so it relies on the story to explain that, and while that it slightly detrimental, you make up for it with the rest of the avatar and a clear, precise description.



Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40

Feedback (if any): There are a lot of bits in here that make me want to really really love it...however I have a hard time doing that because it feels very packed in.


Total: 66
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lovest harding:User Image

She would enjoy them. Savoring their bodies and pushing the pleasure as far as she could. Then she'd give herself to the Beast and in an instant they were mauled and eaten, their blood soaking into the ground.

She'd let the Beast swallow her lovers, sustaining itself on their bodies and souls. And she would take anything else she'd need. Briefcases, wallets, jewelry, money, all useful tokens, memories that could keep her in fine clothing, beautiful homes, and young forever.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40

Feedback: I know this is kind of irrelevant, but I wanted to point out that I actually liked your entry last round, and while my score for it wouldn't have been exceptionally high, it would've been higher than you were given. Maybe I'm a little swayed because I'm familiar with your style, but I would've been able to justify my score. The style was very 'sexy'; I got what you were going for. And while the face could've used same major improvements and the avatar itself could've been presented as more evil, it wasn't a bad entry. That out the way, your entry this round is a massive improvement. The 'sexiness' has been amped up, it's far more evil and the character is just a lot stronger. I'm not going to say it's incredible because it's not, but it's a good, solid entry and pretty much every aspect is of a good standard. Her means of stealing are kind of ambiguous but I like that about this entry - the mystery adds to her evil 'sexiness'. The story is a nice, informative addition.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 34/40

Feedback (if any): I like how your character has grown, you've done a lot with her here despite having her as a stand alone. My favorite part is the face on this - lovely and wicked.


Total: 66

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Jamais Changeant: User Image
Pulled straight from the pages,
Not evil you say?
How interesting are your stories,
When the treasures go away?

Hercules steps from the books,
A dazed look on his face.
And hands me the golden apple,
All falls out of place.

The order of your world,
Kept carefully in your tales.
What a fun little game,
To see your imaginations fail!

Theme: 4/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 26/40

Feedback: I'll be honest, I really had no idea how I should score this entry. While it is a good, interesting avatar, I really had no clue what was going on. The problem I have with this is that it's not at all clear what you were going for and I had to make my own tenuous interpretation of your theme. Here's what I think it is: Your villain conjures seemingly 'good' characters from books that steal from the owner of said books and bring the riches to you? If that's what it is, then you needed to make that clearer, and if it's not then... you needed to make what you were going for clearer.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 31/40

Feedback (if any): I like how this reflects your villain and helps show how they are shaping up and starting to work, I'm getting an Inkheart feel from this.


Total: 57

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Kiddo Seanchain:User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Seanchain studied the squalid basement with no small measure of disgust. She had spent so much of her resources - both magical and mundane – to find this place and now here she stood with dust coating her gloves and hair and not a single whiff of the occult to be found. Books lay in a heap at her feet, overturned in increasing carelessness until the nearby shelves lay barren. It had to be here. It had to. The owner of the manor was rich, powerful, and rumored to have connections to the arcane powers in the world – and the last known owner of a particular tome Seanchain was most interested in. She should have been able to waltz in, take the book, and waltz out. Instead, she stood here frustrated and empty-handed, wondering if she should just start sticking dynamite in random chinks in the basement walls and see if there wasn't a secret vault somewhere. With the book. And riches. Wouldn't that be enough to make up this disaster of an excursion?

To make matters worse, she'd ran into the owner of the manor on her way in, and had... erred... in her reaction. If she had known the book would be this hard to find she wouldn’t have done something so... permanent.

In retrospect, Seanchain supposed she should have learned the reversal for that particular transformation spell. Ah, hindsight.

“Well, let's see if we can turn this from a complete loss,” she murmured, picking up the rat at her feet by its tail, “I think a thorough investigation of your priceless arts gallery is in order, don't you? And after that... let's find a cat.”

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40

Feedback: I think it's a really adorable approach to the round, and very different to all the other entries in that it's a much more light-hearted scene. I don't have much else to say except that I think it has a lot of personality and the outfit and background, separately, are nicely cohesive. The reason you didn't get a higher score was because, while it is a good entry, it's not outstanding, but it's still a good score so... I'mma stop rambling xD Good, solid entry.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40

Feedback (if any): This was an interesting take on things and the joke you threw in with it greatly amused me.


Total: 65

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Last of 9:User Image

There he was. Perhaps, in that day he was the true villain, and I a hero of sorts who liberated a people from that wizard's tyranny. I choose to see, regardless of my action, that day was the beginning of a new and greater tyranny.

He was a wizard of dark arts using his power for monetary gain, and some force deep with in me told me I needed to relinquish that power from him and put it to a greater cause, the destruction of my oppressors. My tactics were a mystery, but my actions spread rumors like wildfire when I conquered his mysticism.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 37/40

Feedback: I'm lagging a bit after doing all the other entries so I'm really sorry if it's not as detailed but I'm still trying to be specific and sufficiently explanatory. I really like this entry, particularly the outfit. It's really cohesive and original and visually very interesting and appealing. My one suggestion would've been to use slightly harsher, more evil eyes, if this character is as tyrannical as you say in your description. But other than that, this is a reall great entry. Concise, unique, and interesting. I have nothing else to say xD



Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40

Feedback (if any): An interesting way to go about your round. The wizard's expression seems a bit off to me, I'd liked to have seem something more going on there. And the skulls with the roses is a nice addition but I'm not too fond of how the roses ended up layerying with the rest of the background pieces.


Total: 69

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Erroar:User Image

"BONSOIR MESSIEURS!
Welcome to Burlesque!
Let our women entertain you, grab one of the best liqueurs.
Tonight our theme is geisha, ain't that magnifique et GROTESQUE!?"

As he steps of the stage, the girls start with their show.
Slaves to their "madame" and enprisoned in her house of ill fame.
As he counts the money, he grins and says: "C'est BEAU".
"Madame" makes her money this way, without regret or any shame.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 30/40

Feedback: Firstly, I wante to say I ******** loved your entry last round xD That out the way, I'll talk about this entries visual appeal first: You've done a really good job of making a drag avatar. Like, I honestly thought it was a female base at fiorst glance. I really like the layering and detail of the torso but it bothers me that it's not consistant. I understand that a burlesque outfit is going to be quite revealing, but even giving the impression that just the feet have the same intricacy, and making a headpiece with a lot of detail, would've worked a lot better. Visual appeal aside, I was a little confused as to how this relates to the round. I understand that this is how your villain makes their money, but it's not stealing... Maybe I'm interpeting it wrong, but to me, this is not stealing...


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 30/40

Feedback (if any): I get a big creeper feel from this avatar, the skin looks slapped on along the legs - very freaky sort of feel you have going on there. It is a bit of a jump from the original round task however, I could see how he's /stealing/ from the girls but it's a bit far from outright robbery.


Total: 60


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Call me Peachez:User Image
After all of the partying, sleeping around and not knowing remembering what he was doing the night before, Sam was tired of his reckless ways. After his couple of years of training, he was finally a police officer. He didn't know what to expect when he saw the perpetrator; They classified this kind of criminal as "The walking dead" but Sam was not prepared for this kind of criminal. "What is that thing?!" All he knew about the walking dead was that they were not easy to take down. "Get on the ground now!" Sam yelled. All that he got was a purely evil laugh. "I SAID GET ON THE ******** GROUND!" Sam released a few rounds, but nothing. "s**t!" This was worse then he thought it would be.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 28/40

Feedback: The character you've created is nicely clear, and the context of the avatar is pretty evident even without the description. I think the delivery is a little clumsy though. The shoes look way too big and awkward and the arm tattoo is visually very unappealing but I commend the way you made the outfit look like a set and I like how dynamic the face is. The story is a bit weak... it gives a good insight into the character but it doesn't tell me anything about the subject of the round: what the villain is doing, what the villain is stealing, where your villain is stealing from.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 26/40

Feedback (if any): This feels like a very safe entry on many levels. You took a generic look and gave it a bit more of a spin, which wasn't done badly but it felt lackluster in some ways. Costume wise the gun bothers me, he looks pretty realistic except when it comes to the gun.


Total: 54



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High Villainy - Round 1
Max Diesel: (Daemon)User Image

Having been enslaved for years, this lower demon is fed up with his life. He takes his life in his own hands, slaying his master and taking his heart as a trophy. His freedom is now, and he is just beginning. He is now on a quest to find the source of ultimate power, and rule the world with chaos and a bloody fist.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40

Feedback: The story didn't explain the lighthouse.


Theme: 9.7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9.5/10
Total:37.2
Max,I'm very impressed with how it looks,especially with those eyes.Background seems too plain,but you might have what it takes to go far.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32

Feedback: I like the idea and overall theme, I'll be interested in seeing how his story evolves. Not a huge fan of the horns used.


Overall Total: 102.2
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Last of 9: User Image

No one can be named a villain without an attribution of oppression. I am of the oppressed. It is in that way that I've been named a villain, but my story starts in the beginning of my escape from the narrow caverns where I was forced to mine as a slave. I never knew of this oppression, and I can't say how I was able to become conscious of its presence. All I knew was that I needed to remove this metallic contraption from my face, no matter the cost. For I knew that this thing was attempting to tame me. I ripped it from my flesh as it pulled out my eyes. Perhaps it is symbolic of my nature, I saved one eye and lost another, as I saved half my soul and lost the other. Because it was in that day I knew everyone needed to feel my pain no matter who they were. I'd have my revenge and open others to the all knowing truth of self sacrifice, or kill them should they deny themselves the awakening.

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9.5/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 38.5/40

Feedback: My favorite story this round.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9.1/10
Style: 9.8/10
Overall Impression: 9.5/10
Total:38.4
Wow.This is pretty impressive.However,I feel as if your avatar relies a bit too much on a backstory.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35

Feedback (if any): Creepy is the first word that comes to mind when looking at this. Nice concept and the set up quite disturbing. Hand held item choice seems off to me.


Overall Total: 111.9

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Jamais Changeant: User Image

They tied me up for your protection
My job to entertain with rhyme
I twisted words and told morbid tales
That wasn't any crime.

I escape beyond perception
As they sit and scratch their head.
Now I'll bring my tales to life
And laugh at all the dead.

I'll keep the jacket and painted smile
You'll wonder how it's done.
Am I really the mastermind
Or a freak claiming number one?


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 38/40

Feedback: None.


Theme: 8.5/10
Creativity: 9.5/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 4.5/10
Total:29.5
I'll be honest with you.This piece has a nice flow,but it feels...ehh...something is missing here...



Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 30

Feedback (if any): I really liked the verse instead of just a flat out description. The face on your avatar is top notch, but to me the background doesn't seem to go with the theme you have going.


Overall Total: 97.5

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Old Man Vee: User Image(Thumbnail, click for full size)

A twist of the screw... Turn of the wire... Peel back that piece of skin... Yes...
Attach that bone there... Insert hydraulic joint there... Yes...
Hobbies really are the only thing to keep you sane after retirement...
I miss old Rex...
I think it's time he comes back.

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 34/40


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9.5/10
Total:38.5
Great work this round.It's a real interesting take,especially since duct tape is your weapon of choice.Who knew?



Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 35

Feedback (if any): I love all the little details that go along with your creepy old man. I know there isn't much in the way of other options but I've never been a big fan of the skeleton thing near his feet.


Overall Total: 107.5

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lovest harding:User Image

She had been a witch, a monster. Too old to do anything but become a legend. And when she met the Beast she gave it her everything and it returned the favor. Death and sex had become magic to her. With the eyes of the Beast she could seduce. With her own body, awakened she could please then kill. And with a willful touch she could bring a body, cold and empty, back to life.

With every touch her beauty returned. She sapped at the life of her pet, until it crumbled. Over and over again she found her youth in the death of those too beautiful for her to ignore, those too weak to withstand her spell. Death and sex had become her everything.

Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 2/10
Style: 4/10
Overall Impression: 3/10
Total: 15/40

Feedback: Your avatars with sexy stories need to be more sexy and less simple.


Theme: 0/10
Creativity: 0/10
Style: 0/10
Overall Impression: 0/10
Total:0
This feels very blank and it's as if you have given up on the round itself.


Theme: 4/10
Creativity: 2/10
Style: 3/10
Overall Impression: 3/10
Total: 12

Feedback (if any): I love what is actually on the avatar, but it looks unfinished and I don't see the theme portrayed through what is on the avatar. The story was good, but I'd like to see more to go along with it.


Overall Total: 27

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Ramona Razor: User Image
It started out like any other pass time. Tinkering here and there, playing games and maxing out as fast as possible, building and creating her own small toy robots at the age of six. Of course, the more she dug in and learned, the more it became an obsession. Now a days, it's an all out craze, a desire to build that cannot be quenched easily. And to create, one must first destroy. Her smaller toys may go to the highest bidders, but that is only to feed the need for the materials, the tools, and many creations. In the end, what Gamer Girl wants, Gamer Girl gets. With a little assistance from her Helping Hands, she's just gearing up for her biggest game ever. It's time for her brainchildren to have some fun.

Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 39/40

Feedback: My favorite avatar this round.


Theme: 7.4/10
Creativity: 7.5/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8.2/10
Total:31.1
Although it gives off an aura of simplicity,you are playing it safe this round.Let's hope you can make it to the next one.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32

Feedback: This is a nice solid concept, I'll look forward to how you intend to make this grow in the future.


Overall Total: 102.1
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Arizona Ranger:User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

How dare you! I was born into this organization, my parents proud members, and yet you reject me from fully becoming one of your own? Just because of a few failed "tests" that left me *cough*and a few others moreso*cough* scarred? ... Alright, alright, fine. You know what? Fine. If you won't let me ascend into the ranks of heroics, I'll descend into ranks of my own and you'll all rue the day you unleashed me upon this pitiful planet. How 'bout that, huh? That sound good? No? Well good. Because this is all your fault.

Theme: 8.5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 8.5/10
Total: 34/40

Feedback (if any): Some kind of aura or background would have completed this.


Theme: 9.5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9.75/10
Total:37.25
Interesting colors and facial expression.The scepter isn't needed here though.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 29

Feedback: I can see the character in the avatar, but I feel the story really carries it. Nice overall look though.


Overall Total: 100.25

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Kiddo Seanchain: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Roughly ten years ago, Seanchain died. When Death came to claim her soul she challenged him to the traditional game of chess - and ended it in a stalemate. Somewhat amused, Death gave her a second lifetime and promised he'd be back at the end of that one and this time, there would be no traditional challenge, no chess game, no stalemate. Two lifetimes was enough. Seanchain does not agree. She now turns to the dark knowledge of the world, collecting resources and information that will allow her to avoid her second and final end. She has tattooed ancient runes on her corpse-white skin. She has bound a henchwoman to herself using terrible arts to ensure that she can never be betrayed. She carries a scythe so that she can practice for her new role... for to overcome Death, Seanchain intends to summon, kill, and take his place. She will use any means necessary to accomplish this.

Making enough money to buy a small country would be pretty spiffy too though.

Theme: 3/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 2/10
Overall Impression: 3/10
Total: 15/40

Feedback (if any): I did not like this entry at all.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 9.4/10
Overall Impression: 9.4/10
Total:33.8
I had to open the image in a new tab,but it really looks interesting.The top kinda doesn't work along with the shoes though.


Theme: 5/10
Creativity: 4/10
Style: 3/10
Overall Impression: 4/10
Total: 16

Feedback: The concept is interesting enough, but the avatar just didn't bring it together for me.


Overall Total: 64.8
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Kitt Koneko:User Image

"Daddy will sleep well," she said as she poured the poison into her creator's night time tea.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32/40

Feedback (if any): This would have been much higher with more innocent shoes.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9.5/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9.4/10
Total:36.9
The shoes throw it off for me,but your overall concept is just amazing.Well done!


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 38

Feedback: Not much to say here, I really love the creepy little robot girl.


Overall Total: 106.9

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marwolfer:
User Image
Villain Archetype: Walking Corpse
She was once the most beautiful queen in all the lands. No one could stop her power! She ruled with a ruthless, cruel, and cunning hand. One night, she had a close call with an assassin. Realizing her own mortality, she went on a search for everlasting life. She had heard rumors of a demon living in the caves just outside of town, so she went off to find out for herself if the rumors were true. Deep in the cave she found him, hunched and withered in rags. She drew out her blade and demanded that the demon make her immortal or forfeit his own life. The demon did as he was bade, awed over this young woman's gall. He muttered a spell, and the queen felt her whole body go warm. Bravely, she plunged the dagger into her heart. The pain was intense, but she did not die. Happily, she traipsed off to live her long life. But the demon was furious at being ripped off so he stole into the castle while the queen slept and cast another spell on her, one that made her age more quickly. When the queen awoke she was already twenty years older, and within the week she had aged beyond recognition. Yet still she lived. Finally disgusted with herself, she disappeared in the night to live in the caves that the demon once inhabited. Since then there have been unexplained murders with no clues or evidence of how they came to be. The only thing everyone agreed on was a name that they dared not speak aloud... La Reina de la Muerte.
Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9.5/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 38.5/40

Feedback (if any): I think a different crown would have looked better.


Theme: 9.5/10
Creativity: 9.5/10
Style: 9.8/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total:38.8
My only fault with her majesty are the boots.Other than that,it feels rather refreshing.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 34

Feedback: The story for this was my favorite part, I like how it unravelled sounding like an urban legend of some sort. I'd have liked to see something a bit different for the head.


Overall Total: 111.3
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Call Me Peachez
:User Image(Thumbnail, click for full size)
If this is what happens when I join the good side, i guess it's time to shoot up a few cops.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 34/40

Feedback (if any): Seemed a bit plain.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total:40
Holy s**t.I...I am floored by this entry.So frightening...so scary...icon_gonk.gif


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 25

Feedback: The skeleton undead monster as the centerpiece is very creepy with the gun and scraps of clothing feel, but the snake just looks so random to me. Overall I would have liked to see a bit more with it.


Overall Total: 99
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Erroar:User Image(Thumbnail, click for full size)
Born in the wrong body.
Frustration filled his life.
Jealousy took over control.
Shreds young girls with his knife.
Steals their clothes, puts on their heels.
Always wanted to be a wife.

'Cause man! He feels like a woman!


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 30/40.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 8.5/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total:34.5
I feel a bit horrified by this one,given how it's like a murderous drag queen of sorts...Outfit feels too simple though.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 36

Feedback: Highly disturbing. Nice job on the face/head area and blood usage.


Overall Total: 100.5

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Nezzero:
User Image

Theme: 3/10
Creativity: 3/10
Style: 2/10
Overall Impression: 2/10
Total: 10/40

Feedback (if any): I really think you could have done a lot better Nez.


Theme: 7.5/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 4.5/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total:28
Interesting piece,but not enough neon blues to the piece.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 27

Feedback: The face/hair seem a bit disconnected from the rest of the avatar but I do get the overall feel of what you have here, and I know stories aren't required but I'd have liked to have a little bit of something so it was more clear what sort of spacey/sci-fi girl she is.


Overall Total: 65




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High Villainy - Bonus Round Judging
Bonus Round - Henchman:

Max Diesel:User Image

Who is this man that kills in my name? He is Nobody. Nobody exists only to do my bidding. No government, no agency, nobody knows of Nobody. He is untraceable, he is uncatchable, he is a ghost. He is my most loyal sidekick. All i need utter is the name of the one I need to dissapear, and he has completed the task. And not only does he eliminate my targets from their miserable lives, but he erases them from any paper trail, database, or media file. Ever heard of my evil rival Dr. Frildenshturn? ...Exactly.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 4/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 6/10
Total: 25/40

Feedback (if any): I really don't get a henchmen feel from this. He's more of a hitman, less like a villains right hand man.


Theme: 3/10
Creativity: 5/10
Style: 2/10
Overall Impression: 2/10
Total:14/40

Max,upon looking at this,he looks more like a rogue detective at a murder scene instead of a henchman.This feels very plain and stereotypical.I'm sorry,but this doesn't work for me.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 29

Comment: When I think of mobsters this is the sort of henchman I envision. I like that his face gives him personality but that he is dressed as if he tends to disappear in a crowd.


Total: 68

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Old Man Vee: User Image

Hey... I'm Deadman... I'm not much too look at, but Vee needs someone to do the dirty work...
I do most of the grunt work, but hey... It's a living.
Whether it's killing gravekeepers or digging up dead bodies, I'm your... um... Man...
At least the boss keeps me moving with these robotic parts... being dead was just a bore, you know?

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 10/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total: 39/40

Feedback (if any): This is fantastic. This not only screams henchmen to me, but it also gives off the abused-whipped-burned in a failed experiment-thrown into a wild pack of dogs-reject feel. Absolutely brilliant, Vee. Great job.


Theme: 9.4/10
Creativity: 10/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total:36.4/40

WOW.I am impressed with this avatar,given how it's half undead/half mech.Very nicely put together.


Theme: 10/10
Creativity: 10 /10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 37

Comment: Nice concept, exceptional background layering.


Total: 112.4
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Ramona Razor: User Image
This is it. The final level of the game, and the Big Bad Boss is waiting for you at the end. There's just one problem - 8-Bit Boy. This henchmen is at least five levels above you, no matter where you are in the game. Not only is he big, but he's quick too, very light on his feet and moves around the room out of range every time you think you've got him cornered. Hours go by and all you have succeeded in doing is throwing the controller across the room eight times, leaving two dents in the wall, cursed enough to make a sailor blush, and lost each one of your lives to 8-Bit Boy.

Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33/40

Feedback (if any): This avatar plus the story really gave it good vibes. I could definitely see this henchmen at the end of a pesky level. Great job. <3


Theme: 8.4/10
Creativity: 4/10
Style: 3/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total:20.4/40

I like the concept of it,given how your story is,but this...it feels bland.Outfit is interesting,I'll give you that.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 8/10
Overall Impression: 9/10
Total: 32

Feedback (if any): I like this, it looks exactly how I'd envision a baddie in a video game would look. I feel the item choices were very nice for the concept, as it gave the avatar the sort of odd shape you might find in a video game.


Total: 85.4
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Arizona Ranger:User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

Rulers have advisers, rock stars have roadies, and I... have Patchwerk. Old Patch is a former musician, lead singer for the band Screaming Pitch. His fans all thought he'd sold his soul for rock and roll, and they were right. In a way. When I caught up to him I was quick to find out that he was a minor demon using music as a means for experimenting with mind control, just as I was using the whole "radio signal hijacking" method. Obviously, I confronted him about it and demanded to know his secrets. A short scuffle later, we figured out that teaming up would be the best option for both of us, and so we did. Two brains are better than one, after all.

Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 6/10
Style: 4/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 22/40

Feedback (if any): The devil tail really ruined this avatar for me. Without it, I would have given a better score. Also, I think some headphones or some kind of music item (mic, guitar) would have helped greatly with the story.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 9.4/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 8.7/10
Total:32.1/40

A demon rocker?Wonderful.Would have loved a bit of a more hardcore look though to it.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 32

Feedback (if any): Nice look overall. I like the grunge look that Patch has. The demon idea is pretty interesting, I liked that he is a more subtle demon.


Total: 86.1
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Kiddo Seanchain: User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.

This is Allure. She does not speak. Her dog talks for her but only in dead languages. One head speaks in Coptic, another in Crimean Gothic, and there is no name for the last. But she will not speak; she does not need to. Just looking at her, you know what she is. Innocent little girl, sultry seductress, whatever it is you want to see: she's it. So go on, go get to know her. Talk. She won't talk back of course, but does she really need to? She just needs to sit there and look pretty and smile. She'll smile at you all you want, even once the poisoned knife slips between your ribs and you're dying with fire in your veins. She'll keep smiling to the end and not say a word. Someday she'll take over for me, when I've had my fill and am ready to retire. But not before - she knows better. She's very, very patient like that.

Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 30/40

Feedback (if any): This isn't a bad entry, but it doesn't take my breath away. The story really took me away from the avatar. A better story would have earned you more points.


Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 5/10
Style: 4.5/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total:20.5/40

It's a good idea,I'll give you that.Problem is how the execution falls flat.


Theme: 6/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 7/10
Total: 28

Feedback (if any): Interesting color uses, but I'd have liked to see a bit more that pulls the theme into the story.


Total: 78.5
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lovest harding: User Image
One shot to the head and the little b***h was dead. Lovest had never enjoyed competition, least of all those who couldn't keep their pants on or mouth shut. It was a good thing she had trusted Lovest more than Lovest trusted her...

But she was just too pretty to waste. Even death only made her more beautiful. How could she let such a lovely thing stay so silent? With a touch she became her loyal servant. Vacant but vibrant. Cold but beautiful. Dead but utterly alive.

Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 3/10
Style: 7/10
Overall Impression: 3.5/10
Total: 21.5/40

Feedback (if any): I really enjoyed the story for this avatar, but the avatar just didn't click for me, I could [sort of] see how the story would describe the avatar, but they didn't quite fit each other well in my eyes.


Theme: 9/10
Creativity: 7/10
Style: 9.8/10
Overall Impression: 10/10
Total:35.8/40

I love the concept,but if you wanted to give it that bloodshot feel,more red could have been added.


Theme: 8/10
Creativity: 8/10
Style: 9/10
Overall Impression: 8/10
Total: 33

Feedback: The story really helped bring this avatar together.


Total: 90.3
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ShadOBabe:User Image

You can't pull off a scam without suckers. And let's face it, my lack of a certain facial feature doesn't make me much of a charmer. That's where my twin sister Nova comes in. I've always had the brains and brawn, but Nova's got the beauty, and a talent for wrapping the slow-witted masses around her little finger. There's a silver-tongued devil hiding behind that pretty face of hers, and by the time she's done batting her lashes at another drooling fool she's lured into playing my games, I've already robbed them blind. And if the big gorilla gets in the way of us making off with his loot, she's not above putting one of her stiletto heels through his eye. They don't come much more loyal than my sister. She's always ready to do whatever I say. She's a jewel.


Theme: 7/10
Creativity: 2/10
Style: 3/10
Overall Impression: 1/10
Total: 13/40

Feedback (if any): She has no theme, its pretty obvious a lot of effort went into her matching, but that's the point of these rounds. The story was very well written but I just couldn't see this incredibly matched avatar as a robber of fools, even as the villains twin sister.


Theme: 4/10
Creativity: 4/10
Style: 5/10
Overall Impression: 3.5/10
Total:16.5/40

I'm rather disappointed in this entry,given how it looks more like a devious showgirl rather than a real henchwoman.Sure,I get the story,but it relies way too much on it.


Theme: 5/10
Creativity: 3/10
Style: 6/10
Overall Impression: 5/10
Total: 19/40

Feedback: The matching is very good on this avatar...but I don't feel it has much personality.


Total: 48.5



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