[2/8/2012 10:20:32 PM] Metsuki: Chapter One / Prologue - Hannah/Beatriz (...Selling Santiagos Soul?)
[2/8/2012 10:21:46 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Two - Spring / Roselyn (How to be a boy)
[2/8/2012 10:22:30 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Three - All Aboard the Dragon's Dream
[2/8/2012 10:23:47 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Five - Demon in the Mirror
[2/8/2012 10:24:52 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Seven - Crossroads of a Pirate
[2/8/2012 10:24:54 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Four - ( The Female only Band)
[2/8/2012 10:26:05 PM] Metsuki: Six- (How to be a girl)
[2/8/2012 10:27:42 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Eight - (What makes a Pirate)
[2/8/2012 10:28:01 PM | Edited 10:28:27 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Nine - How to Recruit a Cook
[2/8/2012 10:29:21 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Ten - Making a Friend
[2/8/2012 10:30:38 PM | Edited 10:31:15 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Eleven - Twisted Revelations
[2/8/2012 10:40:37 PM | Edited 10:41:43 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Twelve - Keep out of my kitchen!
[2/8/2012 10:42:15 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Thirteen - What to Do With a Mermaid
[2/8/2012 10:43:53 PM] Hannah Kovach: Yeah, Beatriz pretty much confessed her love for him after a confrontation between the captain and Dolor.
[2/8/2012 10:45:38 PM] Hannah Kovach: This time around, he'll know, but he never confronts Dolor because since he's in Beatriz's body, Dolor could manipulate the situation so it looks like the captain (whose name needs changing) is yelling at Beatriz, and further force Beatriz's hand.
[2/8/2012 10:46:06 PM] Hannah Kovach: Remember, Dolor is a manipulative b*****d.
[2/8/2012 10:47:16 PM] Hannah Kovach: He's much older than her, almost old enough to be her father, and he sees her as a daughter figure.
[2/8/2012 10:48:45 PM] Hannah Kovach: Yeah, she had fallen for Marie, but since it's pretty much Renaissance era Catholic time, she tried to suppress those feelings, and the moment she felt something similar for a male figure in her life, she just latched on to those feelings.
[2/8/2012 10:50:01 PM] Hannah Kovach: Actually, I wanted him to send the invitation next chapter.
[2/8/2012 10:50:10 PM | Edited 10:54:26 PM] Metsuki: Chapter fourteen - The Royal Invitation
[2/8/2012 10:50:44 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Fifteen - The Spark of Alliance
[2/8/2012 10:51:06 PM] Hannah Kovach: Either meets Armand or Jonah
[2/8/2012 10:51:40 PM | Edited 10:51:47 PM] Hannah Kovach: Really, the Navy wouldn't seize the chance to capture who knows how many of the most notorious pirates in one place?
[2/8/2012 10:52:24 PM | Edited 10:52:31 PM] Hannah Kovach: Good point, but remember, he started drinking again and got re-conscripted.
[2/8/2012 10:52:44 PM] Hannah Kovach: Poor Jonah. He was such a sad puppy.
[2/8/2012 10:53:23 PM] Hannah Kovach: Also, the captain of Jonah's Navy ship is a bit of a kook.
[2/8/2012 10:53:53 PM] Hannah Kovach: Not the new one. Jonah's serving under a different captain than the d**k captain.
[2/8/2012 10:54:44 PM] Hannah Kovach: Beatriz meets Jonah in the vampire bay, and saves his life. He, in turn, refuses to arrest her.
[2/8/2012 10:55:04 PM] Hannah Kovach: He's brought to the ship.
[2/8/2012 10:55:30 PM] Hannah Kovach: Probably because Beatriz's captain loves a party, and if there's an alliance with the Navy, then there's no risk of the party being pooped.
[2/8/2012 10:56:33 PM] Metsuki: Chapter sixteen - An Alchoholics Interlude
[2/8/2012 10:57:47 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Seventeen - Let the Party Begin
[2/8/2012 10:59:53 PM] Hannah Kovach: Oh, and Beatriz and Armand making that special alliance. razz
[2/8/2012 11:00:27 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Eighteen - Old Friends
[2/8/2012 11:03:04 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Nineteen - Trouble in Bodega Bay
[2/8/2012 11:06:18 PM] Hannah Kovach: A vampire named Warren.
[2/8/2012 11:06:28 PM] Hannah Kovach: Random vampire.
[2/8/2012 11:07:58 PM] Hannah Kovach: Kind of; they rescue each other. Armand actually hears what Dolor tells Roselyn (that he'll kill her and make Beatriz enjoy his depraved ministrations) and becomes extremely protective of her, and Dolor nearly kills Armand, and Beatriz saves him.
[2/8/2012 11:09:22 PM] Hannah Kovach: Dolor is just about to stake Armand, and Beatriz distracts him... I don't remember how, I think she tries to compel him to enter her body or throws a cross at him.
[2/8/2012 11:09:59 PM | Edited 11:15:07 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Twenty - Dawns Decisions
[2/8/2012 11:09:59 PM] Hannah Kovach: Question: is Roselyn going to become a vampire?
[2/8/2012 11:11:06 PM] Hannah Kovach: We were on the fence. She actually went to Armand and asked to be turned into a vampire, and then Armand refused. After Rosey persists, he reluctantly gives in right in time for Jonah to step in and go "OH HECK NO" and then they fight.
[2/8/2012 11:11:47 PM] Hannah Kovach: She wanted to protect Beatriz because she felt helpless compared to Armand or to Dolor.
[2/8/2012 11:12:03 PM] Hannah Kovach: Also, she thinks she's the only one who heard what Dolor told her.
[2/8/2012 11:13:26 PM] Hannah Kovach: Armand actually gives her quite the pep talk, and tells her that she's more powerful than she realizes. Additionally, he tells her to tell the rest of the crew about Dolor's intent.
[2/8/2012 11:13:56 PM] Hannah Kovach: Well, that's something I'm hoping that would be put into the novel that wasn't in the RP.
[2/8/2012 11:14:34 PM] Hannah Kovach: It's Decisions.
Chapter Twenty-One: The Storm
[2/8/2012 11:15:54 PM | Edited 11:16:03 PM] Hannah Kovach: Well, the hurricane's just a natural disaster, but Dolor actually guides the Dragon's Dream through the storm. I think the storm lasts between three days and a week.
[2/8/2012 11:17:15 PM] Hannah Kovach: Yeah, because Rosey though Armand may have gotten Beatriz pregnant.
[2/8/2012 11:17:41 PM] Hannah Kovach: Not yet. biggrin
[2/8/2012 11:17:58 PM] Hannah Kovach: I'm trying to think of who Beatriz is going to end up with, if anyone.
[2/8/2012 11:18:30 PM] Hannah Kovach: Because she's going to end up as the captain. Marie got married to someone who loves her dearly, and she loves him too.
[2/8/2012 11:18:52 PM] Hannah Kovach: Poor Beatriz. I break her heart so many times.
[2/8/2012 11:19:26 PM] Hannah Kovach: I thought that writing was the socially acceptable form of sadism. biggrin
[2/8/2012 11:21:02 PM] Hannah Kovach: SWEARING ALERT Yeah, my villains are depraved ********. SWEARING DONE.
[2/8/2012 11:22:04 PM] Hannah Kovach: Yeah, in the storm, I think Beatriz lets Dolor possess her nearly completely in order to make sure the Dragon's Dream survives the storm.
[2/8/2012 11:24:36 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Twenty Two - The Spirit of the Ruby
[2/8/2012 11:24:48 PM] Hannah Kovach: Oh, and the Dragon's Dream subconsciously recognizes Beatriz's sacrifice. This will be HUGE later in the novel.
[2/8/2012 11:25:08 PM] Hannah Kovach: Yes, we are definitely doing the ruby plotline.
[2/8/2012 11:25:46 PM] Hannah Kovach: Nah, Dolor was never in love with the king. The sorceror who imprisoned him was.
[2/8/2012 11:26:11 PM] Hannah Kovach: Dolor is far too cruel to fall in love with anybody.
[2/8/2012 11:26:38 PM] Hannah Kovach: I think we could actually finish this between thirty and forty chapters!
[2/8/2012 11:26:59 PM] Hannah Kovach: I know I want one of the chapters to be called Demon Bride.
[2/8/2012 11:27:28 PM] Hannah Kovach: He tries to force her to become a demon.
[2/8/2012 11:27:34 PM] Hannah Kovach: In order to sacrifice her.
[2/8/2012 11:27:46 PM] Hannah Kovach: Oh, and he tries to rape her, but she fights him off.
[2/8/2012 11:28:10 PM] Hannah Kovach: Should we bring up the dickhead uncle who put her in the asylum?
[2/8/2012 11:29:08 PM] Hannah Kovach: The one Beatriz had a nightmare about and the captain comforted her about it.
[2/8/2012 11:29:26 PM] Hannah Kovach: The part where we realize Dolor is seeping into Beatriz's dreams.
[2/8/2012 11:31:38 PM | Edited 11:32:07 PM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Twenty-Three - Confrontations
[2/8/2012 11:32:53 PM] Hannah Kovach: This chapter would be where Beatriz finds out about what Rosey tried to do (vampire), and Rosey calls her out on letting Dolor possess her again, revealing Dolor's prurient feelings for her in the process.
[2/8/2012 11:33:14 PM] Hannah Kovach: Poor Arita, we're shafting her.
[2/8/2012 11:33:51 PM] Hannah Kovach: Oh, I think it'd be interesting if it only told Arita, and Arita had to tell Beatriz and Rosey the tale.
[2/8/2012 11:35:24 PM] Hannah Kovach: Poor Rosey, it seems her life's revolving around Beatriz, because I'm making Beatriz such a standout. MAKE HER OWN STORIES. biggrin
[2/8/2012 11:36:28 PM] Hannah Kovach: And you'll expand that for her in her chapters?
[2/8/2012 11:36:58 PM] Hannah Kovach: I was hoping that maybe Rosey would be the one to ultimately vanquish Dolor.
[2/8/2012 11:37:12 PM] Hannah Kovach: But Beatriz would have to be the one to cast him out of her first.
[2/8/2012 11:37:35 PM] Metsuki: Chapter Twenty four - Tentitive Normality
[2/8/2012 11:38:26 PM] Hannah Kovach: Oh, and something I absolutely adored was how you expanded so much on her love of reading and cooking. Maybe she could be an aspiring writer.
[2/8/2012 11:39:28 PM] Hannah Kovach: We also have to remember that Rosey's powers gives her secrets that nobody but her and the secret-keeper knows.
[2/8/2012 11:40:15 PM] Hannah Kovach: She's armed with the power of secrets; thus, she could control people into teaching her how to be a more powerful pirate.
[2/8/2012 11:40:56 PM] Hannah Kovach: Yes!!! biggrin Who should be the captain in the end, Rosey or Beatriz?
[2/8/2012 11:42:07 PM] Hannah Kovach: Beatriz is straddling the line between sanity and insanity, and she acts more as a quartermaster than a first mate anyway.
[2/8/2012 11:42:55 PM] Hannah Kovach: I think the fan fictioneers would make Beatriz and Rosey the OTP.
[2/8/2012 11:43:05 PM] Hannah Kovach: So much.
[2/8/2012 11:43:35 PM | Edited 11:43:42 PM] Hannah Kovach: And considering that Rosey resembles Marie, someone that Beatriz loved in canon....
[2/8/2012 11:44:36 PM] Hannah Kovach: I'm having difficulty, because Beatriz would be pissed at me if she weren't getting consistently laid by one person at the end of her tale, but I don't know who'd she end up with.
[2/8/2012 11:45:10 PM] Hannah Kovach: Armand has a HUGE conflict of interest now that he's the first mate to the King of Pirates.
[2/8/2012 11:47:05 PM] Hannah Kovach: I mean, they obviously did that to make Will and Elizabeth's lives worse. <pouts because she OTPs them>
[2/8/2012 11:47:34 PM] Hannah Kovach: YEAH, and Jack WOULD HAVE been PERFECT.
[2/8/2012 11:48:04 PM] Hannah Kovach: Not Will's fault. Jack LITERALLY HAD THE HEART IN HIS HAND AND COULD HAVE STABBED IT BEFORE WILL GOT STABBED.
[2/8/2012 11:50:10 PM] Hannah Kovach: Warren was gay.
[2/8/2012 11:51:06 PM] Hannah Kovach: Hmm... I was thinking we have far too few crewmates actually described in detail.
[2/8/2012 11:51:16 PM] Hannah Kovach: Maybe we could something with one of them.
[2/8/2012 11:52:16 PM] Hannah Kovach: We haven't even thought of the quartermaster yet.
[2/8/2012 11:52:35 PM] Hannah Kovach: Hmm... who is Rosey going to be with?
[2/8/2012 11:52:57 PM] Hannah Kovach: Okay, Rosey/Jonah OTP then. biggrin
[2/8/2012 11:53:33 PM] Hannah Kovach: I was thinking of doing something particularly high on crack and having Jonah end up with Beatriz, but seriously, CRACK.
[2/8/2012 11:53:43 PM] Hannah Kovach: A marriage between them.
[2/8/2012 11:54:34 PM] Hannah Kovach: WAIT A MINUTE.
[2/8/2012 11:54:46 PM] Hannah Kovach: What about that crazy captain of Jonah's?
[2/8/2012 11:55:33 PM] Hannah Kovach: Yeah, maybe they were flirting but they were too drunk to actually do anything with each other, much to their chagrin.
[2/8/2012 11:55:53 PM] Hannah Kovach: Oh yeah, that too, of course!
[2/8/2012 11:56:04 PM] Hannah Kovach: Oh, only Beatriz realizes it.
[2/8/2012 11:56:16 PM] Hannah Kovach: No, Beatriz realizes it.
[2/8/2012 11:57:05 PM] Hannah Kovach: Ah... they can inadvertently fall for each other as they set up Jonah and Rosey.
[2/8/2012 11:57:21 PM] Hannah Kovach: And this would explain why Rosey's the captain at the end rather than Beatriz.
[2/8/2012 11:58:14 PM] Hannah Kovach: Because having the two captains married to each other would create a conflict of interest for both ships, because the two captains would want to sail together all the time.
[2/8/2012 11:59:19 PM] Hannah Kovach: But what about Beatriz's connection with the Dragon's Dream?
[12:00:18 AM] Hannah Kovach: Yeah, once Beatriz is free of the possession, the Dragon's Dream can let her go.
[12:00:49 AM] Hannah Kovach: Wait... that means Rosey and Beatriz will be split apart at the very end. ;(
[12:01:18 AM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter Twenty-Five - The Chains That Bind
[12:01:44 AM] Hannah Kovach: It would elaborate on Beatriz's connection with the Dragon's Dream.
[12:02:11 AM] Hannah Kovach: This has been so much fun! (h)
[12:02:34 AM] Hannah Kovach: Chapter One -
[12:03:13 AM | Edited 12:03:19 AM] Hannah Kovach: Beginning is set in fire and Beatriz kneeling on the ground surrounded by it and clutching her burned face and rosary.
[12:04:38 AM] Hannah Kovach: As the fire grows stronger and surrounds her, Beatriz prays fervently for mercy, and after she prays, she hears something fall (the urn containing Dolor).
[12:05:53 AM] Hannah Kovach: Dolor then appears to her, looking to her like an angel sent from God, and Beatriz innocently thanks God for his presence.
[12:07:16 AM] Hannah Kovach: Out of Outline: I don't know if Dolor was ever really good. Also, the line between hate and lust is dangerously thin.
[12:07:50 AM] Hannah Kovach: Dolor hates her for looking like the sorceror who imprisoned him, but lusts after her nonetheless.
[12:08:02 AM] Hannah Kovach: Also, poor Beatriz. I torture her so.
[12:09:22 AM] Hannah Kovach: She cries that she doesn't want to stay in hell, and that she's sorry for the sins she has committed (we'll find them out later), and please, angel, help God to understand that she wants to be in heaven with God, etc.
[12:10:00 AM | Edited 12:10:16 AM] Hannah Kovach: Dolor then asks her if she wants to be saved, manipulating her fervent religious faith and saving her life literally as well. Beatriz, thinking herself redeemed, heartily agrees to anything he asks.
[12:10:31 AM] Hannah Kovach: POOR BEATRIZ. SHE NEEDS HUGS.
[12:11:03 AM] Hannah Kovach: Oh, and getting possessed HURTS LIKE HELL.
[12:12:22 AM] Hannah Kovach: I think she'll wake up at the beginning of Chapter Three.
[12:12:49 AM] Hannah Kovach: I don't know how she'll deal with her family.
[12:13:48 AM] Hannah Kovach: I mean, her family is still alive after the fire. Actually, the fire started because of the rival family to her betrothed's family.
[12:14:16 AM] Hannah Kovach: The fire was meant to kill Beatriz's betrothed, but ultimately hurt her the most.
[12:14:38 AM] Hannah Kovach: Also, her family might think she's dead.
[12:14:52 AM] Metsuki: Chapter Two-
Rosey is standin at the base of the plank that leads to her fathers ship remnicing about how she came to be there (Her fathers death) and her plan for revenge
She boards the ship and Meets the captian Hiding her hate
The captian says she is to small to be of any use and sends her to work in the kitchen (An insult to her as a "noble" wink
[12:16:34 AM] Metsuki: She meets the cook, an oddly kind man amongst brutes, and in her time learning the ropes also meets Jonah Who takes a liking to her
[12:17:39 AM] Hannah Kovach: Nice! I think she should meet Jonah during one of the rare times he's sober, and they take a liking to each other then. Oh, and then she sees that he drinks enough for an army, and promptly begins asking him to stop.
[12:18:27 AM] Metsuki: Edit:Rose doesn't know how her father died, she wants to be in the Navy to continue his legacy (because he had no sons only her and was a famouse Navyman)
[12:18:44 AM] Hannah Kovach: Nice! I like that!
[12:19:35 AM] Metsuki: She works hard and earns some grudging respect that allows her to learn from the crew, but most dislike her because she is a "Nancy Pretty boy"
[12:20:07 AM] Hannah Kovach: Aww, I can see how that would suck.
[12:20:46 AM] Metsuki: In a few months she becomes good friends with Jonah and the cook and almost a year into her boarding she discovers the truth to her fathers death
[12:21:25 AM] Hannah Kovach: This outline sounds great so far!
[12:21:52 AM] Metsuki: Enraged she trains with the sword under Johna who is an exceptianal fighter and after convincing him to go to an AAA meeting confronts the captian reviels herself and kill him (suprise attack!)
[12:22:25 AM] Metsuki: THe crew over hear are angry, rape her then travel to a near island and dump her there
[12:22:29 AM] Metsuki: End of chapter
[12:22:44 AM] Metsuki: (there is a fight of course lol)
[12:22:52 AM] Hannah Kovach: Aww, poor Rosey! Wow, we totally torture our heroines, don't we?
[12:23:08 AM] Hannah Kovach: And Jonah's at the AA meeting while Rosey's being hurt?
[12:23:45 AM] Hannah Kovach: Oh... poor Jonah.
[12:24:09 AM] Hannah Kovach: biggrin
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