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another day, another bit of bored...right now i'm just gonna add poetry so...whoo... sweatdrop

winter's halloween

the rattling of the old brittle bones,
the earth like a giant ice cream cone.
a tree that creaks with an icy wind,
and an angel nearby that one has sent.
i look into a dog's round eyes,
and see a wolf that howls and cries.
running now, a spirint moans,
and ringing now is the phone.
halloween shoots through my head,
and the frightening feeling of what will be said.
i pick it up and there are rejoices,
"merry christmas!" say cheerful voices.

ok...well...please comment on this...and...THANK YOU FOR READING!!! biggrin






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Mr Elton John
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commentCommented on: Sun Oct 28, 2007 @ 10:39pm
I have some comments!
1. The Earth is never like a giant ice cream cone. You forget the countries at and below the equator.
2. What does the angel have to do with things?
3. You spelled 'spirit' wrong.
4. "Ringing now is the phone" bothers me.

Yes, well enjoy my priceless criticism. Love it, cherish it, and use it! ^^


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