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Hi names Jordan but everyone call me creazy kid or Jak.I've allways wanted to write a fantasy story(still in school so no chance)and well here it will start!
Chapter 2:The ruins of darkness


Jordan woke up to a very load bagging on his door,"Hey wake up.We'll be late.Come on hurry up!"Marco told him.Jordan live with Marco since his Father dissapeared and his mother died in a car crash,"Ok.Give me five minutes!"Jordan got drassed and grabed his torn scarf.It belong to his father and he never leaves without it.
As he got down stairs Marco yawned,"Took ya long enough man."Jordan just gave him a sleepy look,"Its still 6:30 in the morning.Why this early?"Marco didn't know why iether,"Beats me.Fal organized it all.Remeber they're wating lets get goin all ready."The ran out of the house to the park.Mattew gave the wave as he saw them,"Hey your both on time for once.Thats new."He told them and fal opend the front door,"Come on we can talk on the way there."Liz got in the back beatween Jordan and Marco.Mattew gotin the drivers seat.
Thhey stayed talking till they got to the ruins,"Re...veng...kill"a voice whisperd in Jordan head as they entered the ruins,"Hey Jordan you ok?"Liz askedhim seeing his face worried abit,"Oh ya..just day dreaming hehe.Is it true Mattew,that leader of darkness was defeated here?"He asked him,"Sure is.Theres proof on these walls.Names of his minions everything."Marco looked at the writting and Fal shook her head,"How can you under stand it?Its all a diffrent type of writting?""My old man worked for him.No cos he wanted to becuase he was forced tofor me and my moms sake."
They stayed walking around in till Jordan fell to his knees in pain,"I won't reveng Jak.I will kill you!"Just at the same moment the ruins started to shake badly that the walls started to fall.The round under Jordan started to brake apart,"JORDAN MOVE!"Liz and Marco shouted.He triend to get out of the way but he was to late,"Ahhhhhhhhh!"Jordan shouted,"We have to go after him now!"Mattew said but Fal shoock her head,"Its to unstable in here.We have to leave."Marco looked at them and grabed Liz and ran outside.Everyone made it out,"Jordan..."Marco said sadly.


To be contiued in Chapter 3:Fate and Death






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seth15011994
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commentCommented on: Wed Oct 29, 2008 @ 07:38pm
Sry but this one is no better... story is just as good but grammar still looks like crap. Do us a favour and try to use spell-check. domokun

EDIT: excuse this comment pls i did not mean it jak really


commentCommented on: Thu Oct 30, 2008 @ 03:32am
I love the story.. who care abt little grammatical mistakes.
Great work jak keep it up



Aeon-Love
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