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eh tis journal is for my thoughts of the world, the people around me, and the places i have been. i will write peoms and possible short stories here. so have fun reading and i hope you enjoy...jeez this sounds soo lame
untitled poem 2
His eyes were like stars,
His smile was perfect,
His features were even more perfect than a rose.

His touch…so gentle,
His voice…like a song moving to perfect rhythm.
And his kiss…made sparks fly.

He was mine and I was his,
We had plans and dreams,
Then it happened.
A bullet walked right up and shot him.

I screamed, he fell.
People ran calling for help…
He was gone.

My love is now playing games.
While he lies in the ground as a dead rose.
And I wishing he were here or I where he is.
Being scared to pick up a knife like a baby,
Being scared to be left alone.

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  • 03/08/09 to 03/01/09 (19)

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    commentCommented on: Fri Mar 06, 2009 @ 04:00am
    what a nice poem but u made a few writing errors lolz "while he lies on the ground as a dead rose"
    maybe "like" would be a better word than "as"
    "and i wishing he were here or i where he is"
    pretty nice line shows alot emotions

    commentCommented on: Fri Mar 06, 2009 @ 04:02am
    thanx..actually i ahd to write this for a poetry project in school and it just happened to be one of my best

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