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This is my journal, it may be seen by anyone who desires to look at it, but you may be completly confusd about it...Oh, well!!!!!
Hand (The sonnet)
Hand

I think of you today
My delicate love
My thoughts of you weigh
When you soar off like a dove
Your wings a crimson hue
It slowly dawns on me
How beautiful are you
My thoughts were lock and you were key
You fly higher
Every time I blink
Your soul is pure fire
Closer to me you slink
Gently taking you by the hand
Then softly next to me you land


((This is in the eyes of a guy...the girl is the supposed dove...sorry if I confused you))






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Mianka`
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commentCommented on: Mon Jun 12, 2006 @ 10:20pm
A very lovely poem indeed. 3nodding I agree with your teacher. It's a wonderful poem; soft to the touch and loveing emotion. 4laugh


commentCommented on: Mon Sep 11, 2006 @ 10:47pm
Ah. I loves it

Very beautiful.



aribeezyy
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commentCommented on: Wed Sep 13, 2006 @ 08:52pm
the poems feel is nice but for one slink is typically used when something is sneaking and two you might want to add slightly more romantic vocab other than that YOU WIN!
(anything I ever say is from personal experiance)


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