The Never Ending Truth

• Artist: Mewok
• Description: Hey, I posted this in the forums so I decided to try here and see what people say... If you hate lack of rythym or rhyme, then please don't read it... This poem was written in free verse and is intended to make you think about each and every comparison, whether it applies to you and whether you think its true...
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: mewok opposites never ending truth

True love is death
Both are everywhere
Both are everlasting
True love leads to death
And death verifies true love

Hatred is happiness
Both are strong
Both can't last
Without happiness, there is only hatred
Only hatred becomes a twisted happy

Kisses are daggers
Both can start
Both can end
There's always a positive
And a negative right beside

Hearts are tears
Both carry a story
Both hold a burden
Tears of sadness and joy
A heart broken, a heart with a purpose

Promises are lies
Both can be kept
Both effect us
A broken promise is a lie
And lying is the promise made

Dreams are nightmares
Both are there
Both seem so real
Dreams turn into nightmares with a single click
Nightmares turn into dreams with a single kiss

Poems are curses
Both impact
Both are ment
A poem like this is a curse to the good I can't have
A curse like this is a poem to the bad I get instead

Lullybies are silence
Both are spoken
Both is sung
They bring us to sleep
And to never awaken again

Flowers are pain
Both are given
Both hold an unspoken promise
Pain is the reason for the flowers
Flowers cause the pain to sink deeper

Comments

[popsicle]

As someone who has sat on an editorial committee- this would get trashed in critique. It just drags on and on and a lot of the lines just don't make sense. The comparisons are vague and seem sometimes like non sequiturs. There are good ideas there, but it needs to go under the editor's knife for its full potiential to show.

[Angeladr7]

I really like it. It's well thought out and it makes the reader think about every line after reading it. You used some very interesting and clever comparisons (or similes.)