~ Blow Out Your Candle ~

• Artist: transiti0n
• Description: I TRIED to base it on One Little Candle. its a song i sang for choir one time. FOR CHRISTMAS >:D. I'll post the lyrics x)
• Date: 08/23/2009
• Tags: blow your candle burning bright

As the moon shines
With the snow aglow
It's a time for wishes
Heres your candle
And now it's your turn
To blow out your candle
And make your wish

My wish is to last forever
To live and to grow
To live happily with my friends
And grow to love them even more
I blow out my candle
As the flame dies out into the night
The night seems to last forever
With no more light

It's your turn now
To make a wish
It's your decision
Of what it will be
Shall it be domination or love
What will it be?
Be it a good thing
Or even a deadly sin
It's your turn now
Blow it out now

Blow out your candle
And make a wish
It makes your heart glow
As bright as the candle
But the flame has faded
But somethings have not
Things such as your hope
So blow out your candle
And make your dream come true
The candle is yours
So you choose

Comments

[ATREYUS_VAMPIRE]

its wonderful

[Nightfaye_Neko]

really like this.its childish yet at the same time mature

[Kelita44]

Finally! I thought that I'd never find a poem on Gaia that had proper capitalization for each line! Great job!

Now, as to the poem, it is pretty good, but a little repetitive. The meaning gets a little muddy with the way you split your lines. Overall, however, it is a decent attempt at an acceptable poem.