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-Confucius had his Analects and I have my journal-
Poem: The Link
I look into the past
Beyond the day of my birth
I see two people
A man
And a woman
As the woman carries herself into a new land
The man waits to catch up
She waits in this new place
Infant in her arms
To wait forever
At a dock to where her one and only was to meet her from
On his way
With only the two women he could be with from then on
On his mind
The world worked against him
And ended him
He's remembered
The infant shed tears for the one she could never yell at
Hug
Speak with
Or even see
While the woman who waited forever has pushed him to the back of her mind
But still will always love
I see that infant now
She buries her face in a towel and cries it out
The sorrow that is
Only when the world breaks mother and child
Will they ever be able to meet the link
Of the broken family
Once more






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Saygen40
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commentCommented on: Tue Jan 29, 2008 @ 01:28am
Very nice! biggrin


commentCommented on: Tue Jan 29, 2008 @ 02:04am
wow, that's really deep.



dragonrebelfire
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Natsuma Oden
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commentCommented on: Tue Jan 29, 2008 @ 02:37am
very nice , i c u put alot of thought into it and keep it up the disciption and refrence of the past was very intresting agian good job^_^!!!!


commentCommented on: Tue Jan 29, 2008 @ 02:45am
Now where do u need inprovment (it's for ur own good) i would like to c a diffrent genre of words in ur poems also keep track of were u are while writing u kinda drifted from the poem in some places, thats all for now(u can hate for this later)



Natsuma Oden
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Shumari
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commentCommented on: Tue Jan 29, 2008 @ 09:53pm
You always put so much emotion into your work. I think it's beautiful! biggrin


commentCommented on: Wed Jan 30, 2008 @ 07:37pm
heart heart heart heart heart heart heart
heart heart I like!!!! heart heart
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baronesswinchester
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Mcdevvopiez
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commentCommented on: Sat Feb 02, 2008 @ 05:12am
I love your poems!
They're so deep!
I wish I had your writing talents.


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