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  • .Hack//the story p.8
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  • Captain Critique - 11/19/2010
  • ening. This the one thing you CAN'T do with a comic. With a comic, you want to be as clear as possible, and pretend all your readers are idiots.

    I hope this advice was useful, and that you put a little more effort into the whole comic creating aspect of the story.
  • Captain Critique - 11/19/2010
  • Compared to your still life drawing, this is horrible. Honestly, a poor excuse for a comic. I can't even tell what the hell is going on. After reading it ten times, I still can't tell if I'm supposed to read it from right to left or from left to right. The flow is absolutely mind boggling. The words aren't centered at all, and are hardly legible. The word bubbles and panels look rushed and like they were an afterthought.

    Your art is good, but I honestly can't understand anything that is happ
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