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Burning light strikes upon our faces
Like daggers gnawing our eyes
Scents of scorched leaves
And blossomed flowers
Colors of rainbows
flow, from fields joy
Children sprint, jump
and laugh in glee
Our hearts forever bound
to a summer day
The summer of love
May her romance never decay
- by DynnoJ Melloe |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/03/2008 |
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- Title: Summer
- Artist: DynnoJ Melloe
- Description: Screw winter :) summer is better (spring break?? holiday)
- Date: 12/03/2008
- Tags: summer
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Comments (7 Comments)
- PtolemaeusZero - 02/11/2009
- You might have wanted to tell us that you live in Australia... I didn't like the poem though.... 2/5
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- Hamunaptra86 - 01/18/2009
- i agree.....screw winter.....summer is WWWWWAAAAAYYYYYY better biggrin
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- alexandriabar9725 - 01/16/2009
- That's.....wow. it's kinda wierd because it doesn't even have to do with the holidays. i give it a 4/5.
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- DynnoJ Melloe - 12/23/2008
- Well in Australia there is summer break, instead of your winter break in America smile so yes it is a holiday poem
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- Lord of the Dingbats - 12/17/2008
- It's good, but honey, this is a holiday poem contest. o_O
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- Ente Lotus - 12/08/2008
- 0.0 5
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- Fagatron Gobblecoque - 12/08/2008
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I think your poem is a bit confused razz
there seems to be no pattern to the change in diction from 'scorched,' 'daggers,' 'gnawing,' 'decay' and then 'blossomed,' 'glee' and 'joy.'
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