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They start out as nothing but a few molecules,
But together their as beautiful as any jewel,
Diamond, Ruby, Sapphire blue,
You wish you could look far enough to see it through,
But all you’ll find is a labyrinth clue,
Endless, emotionless, no pain is subdued,
You travel beyond the world of dreams,
After all, what’s left to lose?
It burns like fire,
Cools like ice,
So sweet, so bitter.
Some plain, some glitter
You look at the flawlessness,
And you find flaws.
But even the flaws are perfect.
You look at the perfection,
And you find mistakes.
But even the mistakes are flawless.
It burns like fire,
Cools like ice,
So sweet, so bitter.
Some plain, some glitter
It spirals down from the darkening sky,
As you wonder who sent it, and exactly why?
As soon as you touch it, it begins to die,
And you stifle a cry as you say goodbye.
But lift your head, and look beyond,
The perfect beauty, you’re over fond.
Slide back into your memories,
Feel the two unusual harmonies,
Intertwined as one in a melody,
It burns like fire,
Cools like ice,
You’ll touch it once, and touch it twice.
Do you know what is perfection’s price?
Do you feel the internal fights?
Can you guess what I’m thinking of?
Each one is perfect,
But each is unique.
It spirals down from the darkening sky,
As soon as you touch it, it begins to die.
It burns like fire,
Cools like ice,
So sweet, so bitter.
Some plain, some glitter
The flaws are flawless
The mistakes are perfect.
Snowflakes.
- by ii-D o R K i i Ex |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/06/2008 |
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- Title: Snowflakes
- Artist: ii-D o R K i i Ex
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Description:
This is a poem about Snowflakes in a very odd format. =]
It might seem confusing at times, so everyone can interpret it their own way. There are quite a few parts, and some rhyme, some don't. I hope you enjoy it, and please tell me if you have any advice! >w< - Date: 12/06/2008
- Tags: snowflakes
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Zai X Petal - 04/06/2009
- you are soooo lucky to be able to do this, same's pjshell i'm jealous...
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- pjshell - 03/08/2009
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awesome, u put so much hidden emotion into this poem i was overwhelmed with pure joy just from reding it, u rock, i wish i cud get remotely this deep, as, im so jelous
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- noghaltz16 - 01/03/2009
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I'm with you on the odd-interpretation part....but the message is vividly clear.If I have a tip, don't be too wordy even when making poems, there aren't much readers who are diligent enough to read a complicated poem.
poem construction:9/10
readability:6/10
message:9/10
overall score:8/10
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