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On the Holidays meant to be merry,
The deprived girl cried.
Losing all she loved, all that she had.
The bitter frost bit at her nose,
As she stumbled through the cold.
She fell to her knees and wept.
An angel appeared,
but not one with light, happiness, or one kind at heart.
"So you've lost it all you poor, poor girl.
I will make all the pain go away," she said. "With a flick my hand, I'll give it a whirl!"
The girl lay in the snow, rested on her back.
Silent and still it all was,
But in her hand sat a black and red rose.
Then her tears stopped flowing,
and silently froze...
- by Stacia Starburst |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/12/2008 |
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- Title: Frozen Tears
- Artist: Stacia Starburst
- Description: It's just one of things you write about some person to make yourself feel like it hasn't just happened to you...
- Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: tears frozen
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Ab-Soulo - 10/09/2009
- its decent-ish.
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- shivani399 - 05/02/2009
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this is really a heart touching peom i have never heard anything like that not even from a poet and this is just so...
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- dido5333 - 01/11/2009
- oh...my...gosh. That was wonderful!
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- Renee the Rabid Squirrel - 12/25/2008
- I like that your rhyming isn't overdone. However, I wish you had used fresher imagery and more imaginative words. You're using rather plain language. If you really want people to be shocked and saddened, you have to get to them on a deeper level. This is still superficial.
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- Guard13007 - 12/21/2008
- Perfect Poetry...
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- Inu-Rindeseyu - 12/16/2008
- That was great Stacia. U've always amazed me with ur poems and songs. they always seem to get to me! <3 I'll give u a hug tomorrow at school cuz i love uuuuuu! ^-^
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- Asthorin - 12/12/2008
- That was beautiful!!! 3nodding
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