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I look out my window, and say:
"What should i do today?"
I observe a single snowflake fall,
which in turn signals the end of fall.
The cold , crisp air chill the air.
The snow clumps on my hair.
The secrets of my hideaway,
and my hopes to get away,
seem to be driven back my the wash of snow.
There's still something i want to know...
Will i make it through this cold?
Since I have no one here to hold.
the snow's white purity holds no love,
For that poor, sickly dove.
At least it will cover my tracks.
It's something that everyone lacks.
the caressing sweetness of the old,
I ran from there to join the cold.
My body will be lost in time,
Like the garden bed full of thyme.
- by Bacia Bastrave |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/12/2008 |
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- Title: Snowfall
- Artist: Bacia Bastrave
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Description:
It's a description of snow, and the many functions of it placed into a web of lyrical happiness, sadness.
it's a tad random, I admit, but I wrote it out of feeling, and rhyming.
Read it like a story.
sorry it's a little jumbled.
It's about a child running from their folks home, to go die in the snow.
i'm sorry it's so sad. - Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: snowfall suicide nature
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Kenji The Milkman - 09/14/2009
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hey people who have been whining about the rhymes are bunch of amateurs! (no offence)
you haven't heard of free verse poems?
lol nice poem tho! - Report As Spam
- Ben_Crester - 06/06/2009
- even if its not in rhym its the story that i like
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- kayleebug720 - 02/07/2009
- i think that its not that good i gave u a 2 cause it was pretty not ryiming.
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- Abisaur514 - 12/29/2008
- i like it but trying to rhyme every sentance broughtit down a little.sorry
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- Bacia Bastrave - 12/19/2008
- ^.^ Thank you.
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- xips - 12/19/2008
- It's good but there are a couple spelling errors. It seems that you tried too hard to make things rhyme (e.g. the word thyme) and caused a bit of confusion. I get the general idea though... 4* ^_^
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