a little bit of horror !!!!

• Artist: samanthayeoman
• Description: a little short story that will blow your minds !!!!
  
  
• Date: 09/03/2010
• Tags: little horror

there was a girl called jessica she was a very nice girl, but she never trusted eny one...
one day she disided to start trusting her boy friend......
jessica then went missing after going to an restraunt with her boy friend...
all of jessicas family and friend hadend seen her for weeks,
maybee she should have stayed as she was dull and trust less.
are maybee she should have trusted people how noes?
well jesica has gone now and a yeah later her boy friend got takeing into jail.




pleace rate how good you think my very short story is xxxx

Comments

[xXSinfullySeductiveXx]

You should really fix or grammer adn spelling it was difficult to read it that way.And i agree with what Keisuke had to say about potential

[Sergeant Smores]

Could you get into a little more detail about how she died?

[Keisuke Takagi]

For starters, fix your grammar and spelling. I hate to say it, but it's painful.
I would have added more to the story. It seems more like a plot summary right now. It has potential, if only you put more effort into it. I would suggest fleshing it out a bit more...