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She hides behind her hair,
trying to hides those tears,
everyone’s laughing at her,
for no apparent reason,
she don’t get it,
what’d she do to them,
all they do is laugh,
is it her clothes,
her hair or teeth,
because it’s got to be what’s outside,
because if they knew what’s inside,
they would know,
she’s a nice girl,
who made some wrong choices,
she has some problems,
a really dark past,
everyone hates her,
even her dad,
her life is so sad,
and they make it worse,
by laughing and being mean,
maybe if they’d stop,
she'd stop wanting to die,
and maybe she would be happy.
- by a forgotten soul 13 |
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- | Submitted on 07/16/2008 |
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- Title: The Girl
- Artist: a forgotten soul 13
- Description: Sad poem, it's not that good, please comment.
- Date: 07/16/2008
- Tags: sadstory
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Comments (7 Comments)
- fallen_lilith - 01/02/2009
- it may need better words but its lovely it made me feel something but i cant explain it 5/5
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- Hatchet Girl 1990 - 12/17/2008
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My advice: Buy a Thesaurus.
Try to break it up a bit more aswell. Have some sections of about 4/5 lines. It would make it look better and less cluttered lol, but thats probably me being fussy =P - Report As Spam
- LadyHacker92 - 12/17/2008
- HIIII!!!!!!!!!!!!! u asked us to comment, so im commenting, 4/5, needs stronger words. ^_^
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- a forgotten soul 13 - 07/17/2008
- Thank you you guys, I have another version that's better but I need to go find it.....
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- billybobjoepicklefreddy - 07/16/2008
- i like this but it could use more complacated words but this is very deep it would make a biger impact if you used different words though
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- luvmiroku123 - 07/16/2008
- wow....makes me think of so many of the people i know.
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- Deshi_Venshin594 - 07/16/2008
- wow you seriously underestimate yourself i love this
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