keep on

• Artist: ZombieKillerDave
• Description: just a little song
• Date: 07/18/2008
• Tags: seeing

keep on seeing your death and destruction
can it just be animal reaction?
you put the blame on the Lord in the sky
how long you gonna live that lie?

keep on seeing that lust in your eyes
do you really think that its justified?
take from God and steal from your brothers
bet you'd even try to sell your mother

how long do you think that it can go on?
don't you think there is a right for your wrong?
how long you gonna live that way?
go ahead and cry as your soul slips away

keep on seeing you look thru your ugly disguise
when you look to the mirror, does it hurt your eyes?
keep on hearing through your filthy lies
oh good Lord, makes me wonder why

keep on seeing that greed in your heart
you know all this evil is tearing you apart
keep on waiting, trying to see if you change
but you keep on fallin, your so damn deranged

Comments

[Nightmare Zodiac]

I like it but it has "bumps" in it. Bumps are the bit that stops it flowing through. Also as its a song, it would have been good if you had:

1: Put Capitals at the start of sentences.
2. Told us where the chorus and versus were.

It was a bit hard to follow but I think you have potential. Keep writing!