Honor Within Wind

• Artist: Mr Botty
• Description: Any good?
• Date: 07/18/2008
• Tags: honor within wind

While it takes grasp of everything
It will wither all delicate desires.
Funniest thing is it wont stop.
Never rests for a second.

Staying constant and on track.
It will always stay its course.
Obstacles will just be pushed away
And in reality, torn apart.

Some try to ride the wind
With no premonitions at all.
They get exhausted, and die.
Sooner then they ever thought.

Others realize it's there, but dont care.
It pushes them to destiny unexpectedly
And they choose it to be fate.
The wind has intentions of it's own.

I now know it's impossible to control wind.
It can destroy you, and will one day.
But I also remember the life it brung.
I'll smile as it reigns over me until the end.

Comments

[reapersuns manfriend]

bumpett

[Mr Botty]

My Gawd, I feel so elementary! gonk It never wen't across my mind to say brought. Thanks for the help.
Sadly, I can't edit my words though... *sigh*

1st to 3rd? Well, the reason why I done that is to conclude the story. (it's like "The End" inna way...)

[E d i b l e F l o w e r]

"The life it brung"? Okay xD

You have an odd way of wording things- but its a good odd. An interesting odd ^__^

Absolutely love the third stanza, the bluntness of it and the precise wording.

Im not sure, however about the last stanza. In it you switch from a sort of omniscient story telling pov to first person [which I personally dont care for.] Thats all...