A Small Piece of Metal

• Artist: saintbilliesuzie
• Description: I wrote this when I was going through a tough time. In the past, I used to abuse myself by cutting myself. This poem is old, and was written instead of participating in the act of self-mutilation. Please tell me your honest opinions of this poem. It's one of my first pieces, and any pointers for improvement are greatly appreciated. :D
• Date: 07/19/2008
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So much can be done with such a small piece of metal.
Wrong can be caused.
And pleasure obtained.
So much can be changed.


Look at her,
in the drawer so beautiful.
Clean.
New.
Sharp.


So much can be done with such as small piece of metal.
So much wrong can be caused.
So much pleasure obtained.
So much can be changed.

I listen to her beauty.
I pick her up,
draw her close to me.

So much can be done with such a small piece of metal.
Wrong can be caused.
And pleasure obtained.
So much can be changed.

One little mark,
that's all I'll do.
How can I deny it?

So much can be done with such a small piece of metal.
Wrong can be caused.
And pleasure obtained.
So much can be changed.

One little mark,
I'll swear by it.

So much can be done with such a small piece of metal.
Wrong can be caused.
And pleasure obtained.
So much can be changed.

I lay her down on the table,
laced with few drops of blood.

So much can be done with a small piece of metal.
Now my pleasure's obtained.
Now my pleasure's obtained.

Comments

[MelroseHime3316]

wow, this poem....has a lot of meaning in it, like there's another story with it as well, nice job, this poem is great! 5/5

[NefariousShark]

ok i think krezhia123 is crazy or .... anyhow i thought this poem was superb sure it's dark but the structure of it is simply amazing . It all fit together perfectly. 5/5

[daanny22619]

this is a great one give it to somebody who is very sepcial with u