i cant belive

• Artist: smile_andwave_girls
• Description: just a ranom poem
• Date: 09/04/2008
• Tags: cant belive hate

i can't belive that your still on my mind,
i looked for a reason but that i could not find,
you keep on hurting me oh so deep,
and those scars on my heart those i will keep,
i loved you then and i love you still,
i wanna hate you and i will,
and if i dont i'll leave you alone,
even if my heart turns to stone

Comments

[Science Fantasy]

Awful grammar.

[smile_andwave_girls]

smile

[Glacies Everto]

I like this poem even though there are mistakes. I doubt all of mine are correct. Speaking of which, I should go check. razz
Very good, just go back and edit if people are going to be picky.

[iAttentionWhore]

..the thing I hate about most poems is that they have random rhymes that have little to no relation.

I.E. "and if I don't I'll leave you alone, even if my heart turns to stone."

..like.. seriously.. instead of using 'don't' it should be can't. and the fact that your heart will turn to stone came out of NO WHERE. I won't vote because I don't like voting low. It isn't a bad poem.. but i still won't vote.

[crazy_happy_hippys]

great poem it doesn't matter about the spelling

[smile_andwave_girls]

i am only very young and have olny just started high school(year cool i am not very good at proper writing and i find i do not enjoy poetry if i try to hard to have correct spelling

[Atheistic Acorn]

You made grammatical errors and usage errors such as "your still on my mind." You also did not capitalize basic things such as "I," and you also missed apostrophes. "Dont" is incorrect, it is "don't". The sentences could have been better structured as well. 2/5, better luck next time.