Lifelines

• Artist: iBrightScales
• Description: This is something I wrote a while back, and I decided to put it on here.
  Please comment, and he brutally honest <33
• Date: 09/08/2008
• Tags: lifelines

I’ll leave this behind .
I’ll leave everything I ever wanted if you will too.
I’d let you take it all ,
Take everything I’ve ever dreamt, everything I’ve ever known ,
If you’d only leave it all behind.
I can remember the times of confusion.
I didn’t mean to lift you up.
I didn’t mean to let you soar into euphoria.
All I wanted was to leave the broken ground before I fell through.
I wanted you to follow along the lines I was tracing.
But you crossed them and shadowed me.
The sun slips away when shadows are cast.
I fell to earth then.
I fell into the realm from which I was left desolate.
You picked up my heart and pieced it back together.
You used the wrong pieces.
Now, it just doesn’t quite fit.
I tried to let you know, but you were left in shambles at first mention.
So I looked away this time.
I tried to leave.
But I was far too connected .
The lines I traced now wrapped around me.
They became my elegant cloak of all my shame.
You displayed it proudly, and I, I tried to hide from the world.
I let the tips of shame seep through.
You began to unwind them.
You tried to let them blow in the breeze, so everyone could know a piece of me was lost.
I ran to gather what I thought was left.
Then it all disintegrated into the sands of time.
I tried to revive it with my tears.
But that was in vain.
I fed it blood, I fed it what I knew was life.
But it only breathed a moment, only to curse my name.
My eyes broke in that moment.
I sunk into what I thought was a shelter .
I soon found that it was only a crack in my faith.
I ran to the edges of the earth, silently screaming for you to let me free.
But you only wrapped me up once more.

Comments

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Again, your work is a lot like mine, in the respect that it is more prose than strict poem structure, at times. Imaginative.

[Mecca Against Reality]

Dezdemonia said it, it is more prose than poetry, but nontheless it is good work! I'm loving you as a writer, don't stop now! :]

[Dezdemonia]

Brutal honesty? WAY better then anything else on here, but still flawed. I'm picky but it seems a bit long and doesn't have a satisfying flow to it.(I'm not saying pattern or rhym schemes are good or usefully, but this is a bit more prose then poetry to me). None the less, your imagry is utterly gorgeous.