The Pain

• Artist: zabuza212
• Description: I am an amateur so dont kill me
  
  its just a random poem i wrote about 9:43am
• Date: 09/11/2008
• Tags: pain anguish hate love

Never have i seen so much pain
the diary of anguish pursues in vain
following, chasing, running after
forced addiction is the fact of this matter
long roads forged of nothing
built on sand thats quick
strung up like a web of lies
decieved, hatred
still subtle in loving
i'm in denial of the truth
the real truth about yourself
himself myself alls self
in this diary i write in vain
so the public will not see what causes
The Pain

Comments

[lil pixy girl]

I like it, it has detail, yet skims over it, just the type of poetry I love! You still need to work a bit on yous style, some rymes, some looks like it trys to and some plain doesn't, just a thought. (Don't you just LOVE constructive critasisim?!)

[zabuza212]

Thanx for the compliment ^^

[xXxXxbabexXxXx]

i dont think ur an amateur!
this is really gud so dont put urself down^_^
i love it