See the World

• Artist: XxDemonSpawnxX
• Description: Something I wrote on one of my off days. Its kinda sad. But I'm happy with it. I don't care if you don't like it... I didn't write it for you.
• Date: 09/13/2008
• Tags: world

Lost in a black abyss,
darkness is all this is.
Blinded by fear
not a thing I can hear.
Fog in my mind,
ice in my heart.
You know where I am?
Well, thats a start.
If you can find me
you're halfway there.
Maybe you'll save me,
maybe you care.
But I highly doubt that.
If you saw the world from my view
your faith would run away, too.
Not much I believe in these days,
its like running through an endless maze.
You cannot stop, you cannot cry,
you must keep going or you will die.

Comments

[Qwad]

This is really good, I think you could improve it by writing it without words like, "like" xD so to speak, make the poem more definate take out words that make it seem like its all maybe's and is not the real thing.

[Memory Earth]

The was really good! I felt like i was there sort of and yeah, nicely done 5 stars.

[Maybellah]

I like this poem as well. Simple and yet I can imagine it describing your situation well. Kinda makes me feel depressed myself reading it. Well done.

[Online Violation]

I really like this poem. It's like saying that no one else sees what you see, that everyone else is in the dark to it. Although the rhyming scheme does not portray through-out the poem it still has a flowing feel.