Stupid Dreams

• Artist: Kaiuc00
• Description: sumtin i wrote a while ago. and i actually had a dream like it
• Date: 10/01/2008
• Tags: stupid dreams

Demons hiding in the dark,
The soul of man is quaking,
The hidden want is calling,
As I draw near.
Angels hiding in the light,
The heart of man quickens,
The child within screams with joy,
As I draw near.
My eyes search your face,
Looking for some sign,
of those feelings you hide,
As I draw near you.
Our eyes meet,
My heart leaps
into my throat,
As I take your hand.
My mind races,
My face burns,
My heart skips,
As we kiss.
Anger sweels,
Rage spreads,
Eyes open,
As i wake up again.

Comments

[Taste of a Raindrop]

This is a powerful poem, and I like it a lot. It's built like a dream, which really makes it effective.

Again, remember that commas are only necessary gramatically. The line break makes the pause. razz

[Kaiuc00]

most enjoyable.
I gotta say itr looks like you have a major love/hate relationship with the person in your dream.

no the end of the poem i'm mad because i'm waking up during the kiss

[DeCrazySheep]

most enjoyable.
I gotta say itr looks like you have a major love/hate relationship with the person in your dream.

[SexyNanri]

Oh nice,the emotion is what i like too keep it up loves!~ <3

[mozarella cheese]

I like the emotion and the descriptions in the verses. Nice!