Shadows

• Artist: Gefallener_Engel_Baby
• Description: I was in class listening to my teacher drone on about linear equations when an idea for a poem hit me. I am a spontaneous writer so my really good pieces usually come from nowhere.
• Date: 10/10/2008
• Tags: shadows

strange whisperings in the night
mocking teasing
Freeze
a shadow creeping across the floor
closer closer
to my bed
covers slipping
to the floor
Flash of light!
a shadow creeping up the wall
screaming screaming
door is open
light is on
shadows shadows
have all gone

Comments

[hinatagirl1112]

i like the suspense i wanted it to continue but since it didnt u ended it pretty good but since i as an individual are different than u i would have put for the last line "all have gone" rather than "have all gone" the way u phrased it was unique 5/5

[Comde J]

yeah linear equation poem... It's great, and even though it is short, it hooked me in. when I was done I kinda wanted more. definitely was suspenseful, with the sitting on the edge of your seat kinda thing. it is pretty sweet.

[vardo5]

Nice i felt tension for sure! And linear equations may make a good subject for a poem too.xD. Nice work!