Be Like Her

• Artist: possum fool
• Description: It still needs a lot of work, but it's a start. Obviously there is a meaning behind every single word in this poem but I'll let you find your own..
• Date: 10/18/2008
• Tags: jealousy girl eyes love

He placed mahogany in her eyes
Where the ocean sapphire was once.
But why destroy when rivers currents
Can sweep you away?
Silver chains that bind her
And endure the stress of will;
Why let waterfalls erupt,
Yet shield shades darker than black?
He slays the true demon who breathes
Ice, not fire.
Why still shutting dark wings without thought
At the close of day?

Comments

[Maru - Chan]

wow, you just gave me an idea of a story I can make, well im off to read more

[Spyceh]

"Can sweep you away?"

That line doesn't really make sense as a question :/

Maybe try --
"When they can sweep you away?"
That might make more sense <3
Otherwise it was great!

[ccgg751]

ooh this was guuuuuuud

[I Am big goo]

Unbelievably beautiful. I can tell you have a TON of meaning behind all of your poems, it shows so clearly, but yet you don't say exactly what the meaning is. You let us find our own, which I absolutely love. You are an amazing writer, I can see your work getting published one day.

[MechanismZero]

Can't you see, my dear,
What you create is greater than great
It's beautiful and valid
Go tell the false friend who doubts your art:
hey, toss my caustic salad
their noise pollution is a one-night stand
a closet corporate ballad
compose the theme that seems to haunt the sultan's dreams

[freaky kitty1]

wow....that's deep....i know i have my own meaning to this poem..but it's very personal...u wouldn't get it even if i told u about it.... sad that brought a tear to my eye...5 starz!!! favorite list!