Lonely and Sweet

• Artist: onceuponatiger
• Description: I saw a little girl who was sad on the street. the poem is pretty self explanatory. Its kinda short but its okay. Plzzzzzzzzz comment!!! One of my other poems is "Fire with Fire."
• Date: 10/22/2008
• Tags: lonely sweet

I saw a small girl, with pale, wistful eyes;
Her demeanor was sad, but sweet like a child.
I wished I could help her, wished there was a way;
To make lips to smile, that hadn't that day.
"Dream on friend," I told her, "For dreaming is sweet;
You must feel so alone, with your head on the street."
I knew how it felt, to have loneliness creep
Into her small heart, and plant itself deep.
"So come with me know," I wish I could say,
"To the place where the angels, will comfort you; nay
You will never grow lonely again;
With your now joyous eyes, and far lonely domain."

Comments

[Purple_Pearl_Girl]

I loved it. It was as the title suggested, sweet.

[baby Iaya]

*claps many times*that was beautiful

[goldenhappyface107]

its amazing

[Master MandM]

well done

[western_eyes]

I liked the lines
"Dream on friend," I told her, "For dreaming is sweet; / You must feel so alone, with your head on the street."

I did feel like the rhyming was forced at times. Poetry doesn't have to rhyme, maybe you should explore free verse?