traped

• Artist: XxThe-Nightmare-of-LovexX
• Description: This is sort of like a story and a poem so i just submitted it as a poem. I just wrote it in my journal to so if u like it please rate and comment. This is sort of a love poem and towards the end it started to sound alittle shakespearean. I worte it about my bf and and how i felt about him at first because im a shy person sometimes and then slowly our relationship changed and i opened up more to him.
• Date: 10/26/2008
• Tags: traped

you see me and i see you very clearly very true.
but yet i feel as though something is hidden and i don`t see all of you
maybe its me hidding something that so clearly out of view that it doesn`t bother u.
it haunts me all day and promotes me all night to say something anything to let go of all my fright. i losen my mind and let my heart take control its something that to me is very drowel yet some how i feel traped behind walls i wish they would all fall. please save me please save me i cry out like a baby oh please will someone come save me. i start to tear up while my fear comes and rears up. suddenly the walls start to crumble my words are now starting to fumble.freedom from my intrapment oh sweet freedom to who do i give such great warm kisses and such sweet huggs to whom do i give such affection.the walls slowly crumble at my feet the face of my freeer becomes quite clear the walls between us have drawn us near and shatteres at beneath us. my face grows brighter it is who i hoped who i dreamed it is my love who has saved me from my intrappment. he has broken the boundaires between us no longer sparated but one. the name of my love my dearest the light in my very dark tunnel the name i say only once in a light happy voice ethan!! he looks at me. reads my mind as he always does and responses to me yes my love. and i smile and then we walk off into the darkness together and walk slowly towards the light at the end of the road.

Comments

[XxThe-Nightmare-of-LovexX]

me and grammar ha i rarely remeber to do stuff like that but thank you for the complement and ill work on it

[NEO EVA01]

Where are your stanzas? How does this flow? This is a great poem though grammar takes allot from it.