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the restless corpse follow the survivers home
as they rest from there journey
they attack
the pain they felt will be afflected 20 fold
and as they shouted for help
so will they
no mercy
no pitty
no shame
for none was spared for them
they make no one forget
and keep the secret unhidden
kept sketched in the unhramed brains
and as the corspes finish the fade away
and what was a brutal memory fades
to a nightmare
- by -Marshmellow_Maiden- |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 11/22/2008 |
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- Title: guilt
- Artist: -Marshmellow_Maiden-
- Description: guilt
- Date: 11/22/2008
- Tags: guilt
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- Aquatine - 12/09/2011
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There are several grammatical mistakes.
"the restless corpse follow the survivers home" => do you mean followed and if you're talking about more than one corpse, please add an 's'
2nd line => their journey, journey is possessive in this context
There are several more in the poem. However, I really like the concept. It seems as if this could be a poem about soldiers being haunted by their fallen comrades. Keep writing!
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- drkdragoncharlie1 - 11/26/2008
- that is vare good I'm gone to go cry now bye
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