a broken heart

• Artist: TheLastDarkHeartedAngel
• Description: its a poem that tells u that u dont need help mending broken heart
• Date: 11/29/2008
• Tags: broken heart

A broken heart is like no other
till someone comes to sew it together
but even then there is a scar
reminding you that you've come so far
but if that day comes too slow
you'll just have to show
that you can mend yourself
it may be hard it may be rough
but at least you'll know that you are tough

Comments

[DramaDork372]

pretty good 5/5

[omnomNOM de Plume]

I like the idea the poem is conveying, and I think you could even take it further and make the poem longer if you wanted. A few of the rhymes seem like a bit of a stretch, though, and be sure to capitalize the first letter of every line. Also, it should be "If that day comeS" and you should add some punctuation.

[meow213]

that was buitiful

[PK9K]

Beautiful. That is quite a beautiful poem. I've probably already told you that tho.

[Aqua_Ursus]

cool

[CorruptBliss]

Pretty good great ryhming 4/5