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He goes around the corner
He runs into the wall
He speeds through the border
just to get his ball.
I threw the ball again, it's halfway in the air
little did I know he was pulling on my hair.
With a thud, I fell down with grass in my ear,
and with drool in the other made it hard to hear...
- by blueRose98 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/02/2008 |
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- Title: looey
- Artist: blueRose98
- Description: my dog looey. a poem to show his spazish-ness.
- Date: 12/02/2008
- Tags: looey
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Blade Nebula - 07/13/2009
- Haha~ It's cute! ^^ Short and sweet =) Again I love the erratic rhyming scheme =P Umm, perhaps it might be better to put "just to get his ball" on another line to show off the rhyming scheme a bit more? It's just my humble opinion though ^^
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- chaosflame the pyro - 12/07/2008
- lol! xd
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- IDK my BFF Voldie - 12/02/2008
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This is cute, but I believe it's supposed to be "drool," not "druel." Also, there's no definite rhyme scheme and it throws me off a little bit. Maybe you could lengthen it and have a definite rhyme scheme?
Overall, I like it. Like I said before, it's cute. - Report As Spam
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