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what howls at the moon at night
what stalks you in the dark
its what gives lil kids a fright
its what not afriad to leave its mark
the only thing you can see is two red eyes
you wake up from your dream
to find in your room a surprise
the last thing your parent here is a scream
- Title: .......wolf..............
- Artist: BlueTwo03
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Description:
it just came to me
cuzi like wolves and im a poet
hope you like it
enjoy - Date: 12/06/2008
- Tags: wolf
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Deadlylight6 - 09/14/2010
- wolves dont have red eyes...
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- Eye of Dracul - 12/11/2008
- I love wolves too. That's why this poem bothers me. Wolves arent merciless killers. sorry but this poem gets a 2. nothing against you tho
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- BlueTwo03 - 12/06/2008
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klaora- im srry ya that part aint that great
i ment to type its not afraid to leave its marks
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- owlalexcity - 12/06/2008
- wow i think they covered it completely
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- Klaora - 12/06/2008
- Blargle, I hate it when it cuts my comment off. "Tell me when you've cleaned it up a bit. I'd love to read it when you're done."
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- Klaora - 12/06/2008
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Points to you for actually rhyming. Although, there's a line that really confuses me; "its what not afriad to leave its mark" does NOT make any sense.
Spelling would REALLY help as well as some capitalization, punctuation, and, sorry to say, but SUBJECT-VERB AGREEMENT. Apostrophes are wonderful tools, so please use them.
Seriously, just fix that up and I think you've got a pretty strong poem. Until then, though, I don't have much respect for it.
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