Fantasy

• Artist: inmortis
• Description: I need to write a song for my book, and I thought it came out pretty good!!
• Date: 01/02/2009
• Tags: fantasy

I saw you walk past me in my dreams.And man I wish someone wouldwake me from this fantasy.I wish my dreams would come true, I want you to be standing next to me.

But I, guess I'm a little crazy for wishing on a shooting star, hoping my fantasy would come true.Cause, I keep on turnen and I keep on wishen on the same star.Hopen my chance would get stronger each and everytime.

So I guess your just a figure of imagination.Your face your eyes, their just part of a lie.But I wont give up until I find you once again, in my, little, fantasy world.

But I, guess I'm a little crazy for wishing on a shooting star, hoping my fantasy would come true.Cause, I keep on turnen and I keep on wishen on the same star.Hopen my chance would get stronger each and everytime.

Comments

[albino_dude94]

Pretty good, though I must agree with Uchiha, I give it a 3/5 although, I'm a doofus and I'm a much better judge if I hear things, so only then can I give a full report so...sorry as well.

[Uchiha_Sasuke_Dragon]

A little short but over all good it would be a bit better if you had a bit more in the bodys as aposed to the chorus. 3/5 sorry -_-!

[S h i z z l e P o p s]

1 question. Why does the last paragraph in the poem the same as the 2nd. But other then that i think it is a 4/5

[Master Of Slytherin]

pretty good 4/5