Graveyard~X

• Artist: Saki_Assassin
• Description: Well This Is A Poem I Wrote I Love Writing Poems...
  And I Enjoy It
  ALSO I'M ACTUALLY 13 SO FRICKIN KINDA TRY TO BE NICE
  And I'm A Major Tomboy And Yes That Means Ima Girl...
  I Love Standing In Graveyards...
  And Btw I Pictured This In My Head..And Also......I Let Myself Kinda Pour Out In My Poems To Show I'm Kinda Gothic So....
  Ps: I Dun Care If I Win I Worked Hard On This Just Cause I Wanna Hear From Other People
  
  
• Date: 01/08/2009
• Tags: death lies graveyard death myself

Standing In The Graveyard I Seem To Be Alone
But All My Soul Can Think Of Is How The Ghostys Roam
From Town To Town And Nearby Brook
I Watched As The Meadows Shook
To Rumble To Crack
And Then Come Back To Normal Times So Still
Why Am I Still Here In This Place Of Death..?
Without Finally Going To Rest?
Not Even The Shadows Know
Where Should Anyone Else Go
This Is Where My Story Ends
My Time Can't Rest At End
How Do I Still Move Without Eternal Sleep
Not Once Could I Rest Or Try To Sleep
I Try And Try To Run Away
But All That Voice Does Is Say "Why Do U Abandon Me In My Darkest Hour Of Need?"
How Can I Just Let It Go?
My Heart Trembles Me So
I Try To Scream To Not Cry
But All I Seem To Do Is Die More
This Fact Remains Untold And Even Left Untouched
But Where Am I Supposed To Go In Such A Mental Flush...?
Abandoned... Destroyed..... I Lose All Hope And Make My Final Oath In Blood
I Tryed To Run Away...But Never Did I Suceed...

Comments

[Overworkedandunderpaid]

Nobody really cares how old you are. If you're a writer, accept that. You can't con people into saying nice things just because you're too young to deal with it. Suck it up. If you're too young to take mean crit, you shouldn't write. OKay, what is with all the capitalization? Stop it. And the poem, whilst starting with a two promising lines, lost its flow and dropped off into ameteur writing. You need to follow more of a structure, like the iambic pantameter, and no chat speak. 1/5

[Moonlight_Maiden123]

hey chill, i like standing in graveyards to, its cool to check out the dates and try to guess who that person was in this life. I liked ur poem it was very cool. and i dont think no one cares who wins they just do it for fun to.