why do u treat me the way that

• Artist: 1randomsinger
• Description: its called why do u treat me the way that u do but theres not enough room up there sorry about that
  i made this because i got sick of ppl teasing me at school and i thought i would write this in hoping to stop it i read it infront of my class the next day but mabey my poem will help someone els
  
  coments are loved
• Date: 01/13/2009
• Tags: treat

i may not be pretty,
i may not be thin,
but you should see,
what i have within,
a heart,
a soul,
i am just like you,
so why do you treat me,
the way that you do,
cause i have a dream,
that goes very far,
i'm smart and funny,
but sometimes bizarre,
you may think i'm difforent,
but i'm telling you,
you shouldn't treat me,
the way that u do

~amy

Comments

[RandomRemark]

Well, I think it is excellent, I love how you repeat: "You shouldn't treat me the way that you do." That's a very nice touch. You read this in front of your class? How brave. PM me sometime, and rate my poem?

[l_Shamrock_l]

It starts out very strong, and I liked it. However the last four lines lose rhythm and the rhyme scheme that you developed so well dissapears. 4/5