Morning Star

• Artist: pinkbunnygirlmoo
• Description: I wrote this a fue months ago... I hope you like it.
• Date: 01/15/2009
• Tags: morning star

In the midnight hours forlorn
as gray as mist in shadows form
I see a shape intrude the night
only to wink out in the light
the light of morning star reborn
in heart and mind and eyes
I know his name
I know his meaning
the star does ever shine.

will you deny thy masters guiding
will you deny the shapes forlorn
will you deny the love that's guiding
me to seek the truth once more.

I am child born of darkness
I am child born of light
I am child born of father
mother lead me to his door

cast out lies
and cast out mourning
cast out fear that haunts thy breast
cast out hate that lingers on
against thy self, against thy best

father lead me to the twinkling
glory I forgot that day, when
once upon a dusky morning
the horrid waters washed away
my sole my heart
the life I knew of old
in you I am reborn in glory
in faith I rise again

Comments

[pinkbunnygirlmoo]

Thanks! I'm glad for an honest critique... I wouldn't want it any other way! Oh, and you don't sound snobbish, only honest.

[Rietas Tyrael]

its really nice, I like the main flow of it all, but its stops me at times, and the rhymes are nicely put if a bit predictable. Sorry if I sound like a snob, but you want honest critique, ne??? ill give you a 4/5 ^^

[CrImSoN_FoReVeR_DeAD]

It is very interesting...I think that you have talent....